I Felt It

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[I plan on rewriting some of this, I do agree it is a bit forced :P]
I sat here, looking upon the computer
I Felt It
The need to write, the chills upon my spine
The emotion was there
I scoured the Interwebs
Emotions free from the adolescent heart

I think I believe I fight
I Feel the Urge
The Urge to write
Write what is right
Write from the heart
To share and work
To live and breath

'Twas not to long ago
A night of want
A night to find
I found it quite certainty
A light upon my soul

Not from the window of my computer
But the window of my search bar

YWS
Sitting like a door, open, just ajar
Where the writers converse
Of how the criminals steal a purse
Or how the world is cursed
By a plague of greed, corruption, and guilt
Zombies, Robots, Airplanes

However, I resent
This is not my opinion on the website
But my opinion from within, to my poem
If this had any meaning, it could have been said
"YWS, You bring me joy and meaning."
If you feel it strongly, whatever it is you wish to say,
Can be said not in this, but in this:
"I Feel It, my heart, my soul."
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A poem I wrote, it complements the website and says this: If you are really passionate about something, you don't need to write an essay on it, you should be able to say it in one sentence. The poems length is a reference to the hypocrite that live within, an unstoppable force, sadly.
I posted at 12:34 just so it would say that as the time, then I edited it to proofread :P!
Last edited by ShadowKnight155 on Sat Jan 22, 2011 11:48 pm, edited 1 time in total.
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"Peace cannot be kept by force, it can only be achieved by understanding," - Albert Einstein




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It's odd. I love the meaning behind it, but it's chaotic.
There is a difference between organized chaos and pure, down right , wtf is that, chaos. Your's leans more to the ladder. The meaning and words are great, but the structure could use work. In parts of the poem you are rhyming and cleverly linking thoughts together. In others it feels slightly forced, breaking that flow and having the reader stop to think. Though this is sometimes a great way to write, you can't really do both effectively. Hope this makes sense and helps a little. Also, if you want it to sound more sophisticated, don't use 'interwebs' :P It would have made since if you played with that term, but it seemed to just dangle as you moved on to more clever things.
Take all of this with a grain of salt. I had to get nitpicky cause it is otherwise a wonderfully thought out poem :)




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Hello there.... That is a nice compliment to the website.... It is truly a great place to be....
But about the poem i should say that it was OK.... Could have been a lot better....
There were some spelling mistakes too in between i suppose....
Some rhymes were good but some were totally forced....
I know how hard can it be to rhyme words but you don't always need to rhyme them....
Anyway it was a good attempt...
Try working on it again...
Keep up the good work... :)
PM me for anything... :D
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i like it. I think that it brings an air of appreciation to YWS.



Poetry is the art of creating imaginary gardens with real toads.
— Marianne Moore