Something in my closet

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Hi NikkiLow,

This was really great! I loved it completely! The rhyming scheme worked perfectly in this poem, but maybe re-read it because the timing was out in some places. And maybe work on the last line a bit? Otherwise, loved it and loved the humor it presented. It's like a child is saying all this, so it had good character too. And I liked the fact it's got a bit of a cheery feeling to it, and not overly dark and depression like a lot of poems I've read.

And I absolutely loved what your mother says here:

NikkiLow wrote:There's something in my closet,
But my mother says it's fake.
There's nothing to worry about, darling.
We can fix anything with tape.


Really well done! Best wishes for future writing!

RedLeaf



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