Brokenhearted

I was heartbroken at the time and i hadnothing else to do but express my feelings with poetry.

Brokenhearted

Anger fumes in me life a beast,
Ready to tear me open and feast,
Over my broken heart and pain,
And over my sorrows and fame.

Tears well up in my eyes suddenly,
Claiming their right to be shed,
I let them roll down sobbing quietly,
Curled tightly on my empty bed,

Reaching out for the long gone love,
Is almost pointless at this stage,
I shiver, sob, whimper and shove,
Trying to break free of this dreadful cage.

Ages pass by endlessly in void,
Sitting alone in a huge dark plain,
Spending most my life to avoid
Never to fall in love again.

The flow is very well done!! But I can't help but wonder why the rhyme scheme in the first stanza is different from all the other three. You may considerer changing that, which I understand can be difficult to find the right rhyme sometimes. Rhymezone.com usually helps me, but you seem to have an excellent sense of rhyme and what fits. I enjoyed reading this. Keep up the good work and keep writing!

I thought this was fantastic! Really emotional. one tip i have is instead of saying MY empty bed, put AN empty bed. My shows ownership which tries to comfort the reader into thinkint they aren't alone. AN empty bed would show complete loneliness. Just a thought. Kind of shows how important one word can be right?

Thanks for the tips.. I'll see later if I have time to rewrite it. By the way, I make the rhyming the way it is for a reason, but I'll give you some props for noticing.