World of School

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The world of school is very harsh and cold
In this place, those who can handle it show
The ones who do, they must be strong and bold
Without these folks, the system cannot flow


Someone took this on, they were very tough
They were different, one though to be strong
Someone who could stand, even through the rough
But in this new place, they would not last long


They struggled hard for one specific class
A class where they might be able to learn
They fought with the school, pushing through the mass
The person almost won that class they yearn


In the end, they did not win, it was done
Someone else got the class, good, go have fun...




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kill the last two lines...rewrite them.

Someone took this on, they were very tough


The person almost won that class they yearn


both of these lines have such forced rhymes that is pained me
Carpe Diem.



Don't aim at success--the more you aim at it and make it a target, the more you are going to miss it. For success, like happiness, cannot be pursued; it must ensue, and it only does so as the unintended side-effect of one's dedication to a cause greater than oneself or as the by-product of one's surrender to a person other than oneself.
— Viktor E. Frankl