The Christmas Story

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You shall bear a son.

Light surrounds me, even as light is born within me.
Out of all the women in the world, I have been chosen
To bring life to the earth, to give mankind a savior.
In all the radiance of purity, still I am marked,
Branded by the iron hand of fate.
Even in my innocence, a price must be payed.

A sword shall pierce your soul.

Light across the sky, beautiful and blinding,
Filled with the voices of a thousand choirs.
Falling to our knees, hearing words we never dreamed;
Our minds filled with but one desire:
Run, run, run, before it's too late.
Behold what you have sought.

This will be a sign to you.

Light falls down upon our dazzled eyes,
Falls from the single star that shines above the clouds.
Silent as the virgin snow upon the ground,
But still we hear the unspoken words:
Believe and you will find the answer.
Follow this light to everlasting life.

We have come to worship Him.

Light cannot pierce me; within these walls of stone
I see nothing but my broken crown upon His head.
My throne within these shadows is all I have,
And I will not see this phantom sitting in my place.
Take your swords and do what you must;
Within these walls I will not hear the screams.

She is weeping for her children.

Light is born with me, into a darkened world.
Who am I, that they should bow before me?
She smiles down at me, but in that smile
There is pain; even in the joyous songs
Sung by the shining ones, there is sorrow.
On my fragile shoulders rests the weight of the universe.

There is born to you this day a savior.
You must be swift as the coursing river,
With all the force of a great typhoon,
With all the strength of a raging fire,
Mysterious as the dark side of the moon.




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I absolutely love this poem. It feels so nice to see a genuine Christmas spirit. It's good that some people have kept the "Christ" in Christmas.
The poem has great imagery, very nice diction, and I like the style too. I like the different viewpoints it incorporates as well.

Light cannot pierce me; within these walls of stone
I see nothing but my broken crown upon His head.
My throne within these shadows is all I have,
And I will not see this phantom sitting in my place.
Take your swords and do what you must;
Within these walls I will not hear the screams.


This is my favorite stanza. I like how you expressed Herod's position and feelings in the poem.

Very nice poem!
"If you ever have a problem don't say 'Hey God I have a big problem.' Rather 'Hey Problem... I have a big God and it's all going to be okay."




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Dear Warrior Princess,

Your poem is just great! I love it! By everything I have read till now in this poem, I can guess that you are a Christian, aren't you? Well, anyways, your poem is wonderful! Keep writing poems like this. And I have to agree with everything that shiney1 said.

Keep up the good work!

Keep reading and review!

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