a long night

Plonk, Plonk, Plonk
The dishes make their way into the sink.
Blah, Blah, Blah
the news on the radio babbles away.
Click, Click, Click
Mum's knitting make Sam a scarf.
Da Da, Da Da, Da
Sam's mobile sings him to sleep.
While I'm sitting here getting a headache1

......i really don't know what to say!
that was really cute...i suppose for your age and i think you can improve because what you label you'r poem as must be related to it for example you could relate rain to the night or the wind and try a bit more creativity because i don't wanna commentate so much cause you'r very young Squirt and its not like you can go proffesional so nicely done and do you'r best on YWS because this place is where you learn. you know you should read thirteen to fourteen year old's posts on YWS.
Anyway good luck!

This poem is pretty cute, but there is a lot of room for improvement. The whole poem is a little bit vaigue and doesn't really go anywhere. However, I like how you've linked sound to movement, that's very good, although you've done quite a lot of telling instead of showing. I'm not going to tare this piece apart, because I actually think it has a lot of potential, my suggestions on how to improve are below;

My suggestions are in bold:

Plonk, Plonk, Plonk. Nice entry to the poem, it made me interested.
The dishes make their way into the sink. Ellaborate on this? How do they make their way to the sink? Do they skip, hop, run, plod?
Blah, Blah, Blah
The news on the radio babbles away. Who's watching the news? Is the news interesting? What's going on?
Click, Click, Click
Mum knits Sam a scarf. I think this part was a little unnececary unless you can describe the scarf, or the way she knits it.
Da Da, Da Da, Da
Sam's mobile sings him to sleep. I really like this line, my favourite, but if it sings him to sleep, how does it affect you?
While I'm sitting here getting a headache! The ending's sweet, but maybe express the anger for the people creating all the noise?

Overall I enjoyed reading this poem, it was simple and to the point which was great! Keep writing, and as jamesMarcus said, try and read some poems from thirteen and fourteen year old's because they're great to learn from. Keep it up,

~Crim

It's cute
Short but sweet...
I think I like it
It kind of reminds me of that song, "The wheels on the bus go round and round, round and round, round and round!" xxx

This is so adorable. It's like the puppy in your picture is speaking about the humans staying up late. XD
Very nice job.
I also agree with what Crimsona stated above.

this is really good i like how it sounds, like an animal is listening to all these things or something! errm to coment back i would say pay attenion to what else is going on like out side whats happening there is the TV on yet no ones watching it? something like that could pick up the poem more all so using a repating word would help as well!!