My Garden

My Garden

I wander through this endless garden.
Giant, jolly, fuzzy bumble bees buzz by me.
Flowers flop happily as I push past them.
Sweet fragrance fills the air.

I smile, filling myself with the sweetness,
As it fills me it melts my worries away.
All I need to know is me,
And my garden.

I think that you did an okay job on this poem. At some points it seems sort of childish and I feel this could be remided by using more advanced vocabulary.

Giant, jolly, fuzzy bumble bees buzz by me.
Flowers flop happily as I push past them.

When you are writing a poem you can play with the structure of your lines to change the rythm and make it more interesting. I would have rewritten the top sentences to look like this:
Giant, jolly
bumble bees
Buzz
Past me
Just have fun with it. Hopefully you find my little review helpful. Fiction

Justagirl wrote:My Garden

I wander through this endless garden;
Giant, fuzzy bumble bees buzz by me.
Flowers flop happily as I push passed them,
Their sweet fragrance fills the air.

I smile, filling myself with the sweetness
As it fills me it melts my worries away. You're using the word 'fill' a lot, perhaps a synonym?
All I need to know is me,
And my garden. <--Somehow is it possible to lengthen this last line to make it more symmetrical?

It was a good poem, but the imagery felt forced. I like the idea behind it, but it felt empty of emotion. It was interesting and unique, keep up the writing!