Life

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Life can be good.
Life can be bad.
You have to make do,
with all that you have.

You might like to read.
You might like to write.
You might like to ride,
your BMX bike.
Last edited by cupcake on Sun Dec 12, 2010 3:58 am, edited 1 time in total.




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short and sweet, I like it. I'm just not really sure what this poem is about, and (this is probably a typo)but you could say your in the last line instead of you

keep writing, this was good.

-Rayne
BE YOURSELF. Because those who mind don't matter, and those who matter don't mind.

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I liked it, it was short, sweet, and simple. I liked the message in the first four lines, very true.
Werd' ich ein engel sein - Für dich allein.




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the first paragraph: Yep. I agree.
the second: Dont get it but its interesting.
Good Poem!




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Hey Cupicake,

so I think that this was a bit short. And by that, I didn't mean the length but the poem's theme itself. It was like you didn't get to a point. You said life can be good and bad, but you didn't demonstrate anything bad--at least do. XD

Anyway, keep writing!

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Hey cupcake!

Ok, first time reviewing your work! The poem - short, sweet and to the point. Very simple and flowed really well. I really loved the last two lines of the first stanza! Really great! Keep it up and I encourage you to try longer and complex poems!

Best wishes for future writing!

RedLeaf




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Short and totally sweet :)
Keep writing poetry. I loved this!
It's cute xx
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I really like it it's cool and I kept reading it over and over again!!!
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