short and sweet, I like it. I'm just not really sure what this poem is about, and (this is probably a typo)but you could say your in the last line instead of you
keep writing, this was good.
-Rayne
BE YOURSELF. Because those who mind don't matter, and those who matter don't mind.
Two things are infinite: human stupidity and the universe; and I'm not sure about the universe
Don't tell me that the sky is the limit when there are footprints on the moon
so I think that this was a bit short. And by that, I didn't mean the length but the poem's theme itself. It was like you didn't get to a point. You said life can be good and bad, but you didn't demonstrate anything bad--at least do. XD
Anyway, keep writing!
A random review from, Jash ♥
“I believe in Christianity as I believe that the sun has risen: not only because I see it, but because by it I see everything else.”
Ok, first time reviewing your work! The poem - short, sweet and to the point. Very simple and flowed really well. I really loved the last two lines of the first stanza! Really great! Keep it up and I encourage you to try longer and complex poems!
I really like it it's cool and I kept reading it over and over again!!! Well Done
Hello, I doubt you will take the time to look at this signature, you are all busy people and I respect that, but if you do know this. Every bit of criticism on my writing has helped and every bit of advice you have given me has also helped. So thank you, for everything. From CuteJackRussell xoxox