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Chapter Fourteen (Lucas)

“Every new beginning comes from some other beginning's end.” ~Seneca


Six Years Later

The sirens blared in my ears and my heart thundered inside my ribcage. I quickly spun the corner of the hall. From my left, Blair jogged towards me.
“Dr. Price, I’ve just received the call. The patient is a woman in her mid-twenties. She’s gotten into a car accident and she’s pregnant,” she said with a deep breath. Her steps echoed off the walls. She wore her scrubs with a white coat. A stethoscope waved side to side around her neck as she made pace with me. Pinching her eyebrows, she intensified her emerald eyes.
I nodded, taking in the information. We busted through the emergency doors and heard the red ambulance scream and whine. The paramedics worked on hauling the stretcher out of the wailing vehicle. The woman on it was moaning, gasping for air as she clutched the handle bars with white knuckles.
“God, please, please save my baby,” she cried.
I wasted no time. Grabbing the front end of the stretcher, we pushed her through the double doors and down the white tunnel, making our way to the ER. Looking down, a pool of blood stained the white mattress between her legs. My attention snapped to the RN next to me.
“What are the details?” I barked.
The nurse gulped. “Although our patient wasn’t badly injured, the child is suffering major damage from the impact. We’ve managed to halt some of her bleeding but we’re unsure whether the child will make it or not,” she answered.
The woman in the stretcher had her eyes closed shut. I couldn’t tell exactly how she looked like with all her hair sticking against her sweaty skin. There were tears leaking from the corner of her eyes and I knew those weren’t from physical pain but from the thought that she might lose this child. I wasn’t going to let that happen.
“Don’t worry, Ma’am.” I said it with as much assurance as I possibly could. “We’re going to help you. Stay with us.”
The doors of the ER opened and we spun the stretcher into the available surgery room. The team of emergency doctors began to work as soon as we moved the woman from the stretcher to the operating table. At that moment, all I could think of was saving this child and his mother. I had to do it…I couldn’t bear to see another life lost in my hands.
Everything became a blur as my mind instantly clicked into surgeon mode. My thoughts were a stream of motions that went as fast as they came. A mask, the gas, a knife, stripping her and then I was handed the scalpel, a bloody cut and then…the child.
~~~

I stirred the coffee, glancing at my reflection on the steel doors of the elevator. Age was a terrible friend. Late nights and countless hours of hospital duties took its toll on my once clean face. Bruises of purple stretched underneath my eyes, making me look like a zombie. Great.
Putting the steaming cup to my lip, the hot caffeine teased my tongue, forcing me to wait before I actually could take a sip. A clack of heels made me turn around. Blair smiled, wearing her regular attire, a pair of jeans with red heels and a matching V-neck shirt which was complimented by a nice expensive looking black coat.
“Hello, handsome,” she said, brushing back her shoulder-length red hair. Was it weird that that every time I looked at her, I looked at the small mole underneath her lip before her eyes?
I forcefully winked at her. Blair and I weren’t exactly dating per se, but we were friends…with benefits. Actually, her seductive skills amazed me. She knew how to have a workplace affair with her boss and keep it secretive, that being the one of the reasons I wasted my time with her.
The elevator chimed and we walked in together. She stood extremely close to me and I knew what she wanted. Yes, she was probably biting her tongue for it right now. However, I didn’t have any intention of giving into her today.
She realized this instantly and her shoulders slumped. “Are you still hung up over the child we lost?” she asked lowly.
I didn’t answer.
“It happens, Lucas. You can’t save everyone. The mother was bleeding beyond control and the traffic made the ambulance late, these little variables can affect a person’s life dramatically. Not to mention her car got completely wrecked. What in the world was she thinking when she decided to go out for a drive around town in that condition? She was a month away from her due date too. At least she survived, though.”
“But…we still had the chance to save the child.”
She reached over and kissed my lips, probably couldn’t hold it in much longer. Her tender lips didn’t do anything to me but I ended up kissing her back anyway. The elevator halted and she pulled back. We step out casually, like good coworkers should.
“Don’t be too hard on yourself. This isn’t the first time we’ve lost someone. Get used to it. We can save many lives, Lucas, but God owns their fate.”
I didn’t want to talk about it anymore so I pulled up the corner of mouth. “Going home?” I asked, ignoring any more conversation on the matter. I hated talking about dead patients, let alone ones who didn’t even have a chance to open their eyes to the light.
“I’m just going to fetch some paperwork and I’ll be on my way. I take it that you have to work till late today?”
“Yep,” I answered with zero enthusiasm.
“Will you be coming over today?”
“I don’t think so. There is an event that I have to attend tomorrow.”
She looked even more disappointed then but she pushed up a smile anyway. “I’ll see you later then, bye.”
I nodded, watching her turn the corner. Lifting the Styrofoam cup to my lips, I attempted to take another sip but it was still scalding hot. The reflection on the elevator’s door caught my attention once more. I felt like getting on again and riding all the way to the top floor. I felt like looking out the window and observing the city lights. I did that on my spare time. Today though, I just didn’t have the heart.
~~~

The next morning, I scurried around my apartment floor in search of my belt. That belt matched specifically with the sleek black suit I planned on wearing and I didn’t want to buy another one. Actually, I just didn’t have the time.
The buzzer rang and I paced towards it. “Who is it?” I asked into the intercom.
“Yo, bro! It’s me, Boe…hey, that rhymed!”
I buzzed him in. “The door’s open.” I walked to the kitchen and poured myself a cup of water. By the time I was through with the glass, the door opened, revealing a tubby man. Boe Pigman. He was wearing a button down white shirt in which I could see the wife beater underneath. Black pants squeezed his thighs and I couldn’t be sure whether they were a little too short or a little too tight. Maybe both. His usual wild head of hair was tamed today, making him look like a business-guy wannabe. Boe Pigman probably had the worst name in the history of names but it fit his ever piggy personality perfectly. No pun intended. Either way, the guy had a clean, pure heart of gold. One in which I respected.
His tiny steps took him to the fridge where he pried into my castle of goodies, pulling out a slice of pie. “You gonna eat this?”
“No.”
I heard the drawer open and the silverware jingled as he found a spoon and began chewing down. In the matter of minutes, his plate was empty. “So,” he said, leaning back on the couch while observing me tornado the room, “do you really want to go through with this? I mean, what if she finds you?”
“She won’t find me,” I replied, lifting up a pair of red panties off my bed…Blair. It must’ve been from the night before. “I’ll be extra careful anyway.” What did Blair leave in yesterday morning then?
“Why do it then? I could just go and drop off the present for you.” He mentioned this like it was the best idea he’s ever come up with and as far as I knew, it was.
“I want to see her though. I should at least be able to do that. One look, Boe, that’s all.” I flicked the panties into my laundry basket and continued searching my room.
“Hopefully that one look won’t kill you. I still think this is a death wish,” he muttered. After a while, he stood up and peeked at me as I looked under my bed like a four year old child. Found it. “What the hell are you doing?” he asked.
“Nothing,” I laughed. “I was just looking for something.” Quickly, I buckled the belt around my waist and stood in front of the full length mirror. My hair was over-combed so I shagged it with my fingers, reliving myself of the ‘old guy’ look. I was only twenty four for Christ’s sakes.
“Ready?” Boe scanned me up and down. “Geez, are you trying to get noticed? Girls will check out that Gucci and flip, might have to do some CPR, bro.”
I smirked but said nothing. Opening the closet, there was a robin egg’s blue elegant bag with ribbons. I picked it up and we left the apartment in silence.
~~~

The banquet hall was filled with people. All of them were wearing silky colorful dresses and suits with sparkly jewelry. The hall itself was a gentle gold with the casual strings of red here and there to enhance the flavors.
“She has a lot of friends,” Boe said with a grin.
“I’m not surprised.” My eyes scanned the area, trying to pin point her location. “Do you see her?” Boe wasn’t listening. Instead, he was watching the food table with a drooling expression. I sighed, “If you’re that hungry then go eat. I’ll drop off the present and meet you later.”
He bobbed his head up and down like a puppy. “Alright, don’t get caught.” He made his way towards the table of paradise with shining eyes and greedy fingers.
I held back the urge to laugh at him. What a cutie, Boe. A loud snort coming from my right pulled my attention up to alert and I ducked my head in an attempt to keep a low profile. The woman who laughed was large plump lady with a heavily powered face, like a geisha.
In an instant, I pushed my way through the thicket of bodies and arrived at the gift table which was filled with assorted sizes of bags and boxes of every freaking color of the rainbow. She was just as popular as ever. My palms were sweaty and my chest suddenly felt heavy as I looked as some of the familiar names. Janice Mitchells, Mike Audi, Hunter Grahams, Pricilla Hernandez…Hunter? That bastard was invited too?
I spun around and skimmed the area but instead of catching the predator, I caught my prey. My heart practically lurched when my eyes locked onto her.
She was across the room, near a large ice sculpture of an angel. A red dress fell over her slender body, showing off every curve with no shame. Her chocolate hair was pulled up in a gorgeous messy bun that looked natural, elegant, wild, and clean all at the same time. She was beautiful and I felt like I was looking across an ocean at a Goddess who I could never touch. My jaw hardened as I swallowed the regurgitating emotions.
Liliah was standing next to a man that was perhaps a foot taller than her. That was probably him, her fiancé. He was dressed in black suit with a silver tie. His blond hair matched Liliah’s messy one. How nice, they looked like Romeo and Juliet without the tragedy.
From what I knew about Liliah’s fiancé, Jesse Williams, he was a big-shot. She surely caught herself a big fish for that matter. He was student, still in school and on his way to become a defense lawyer.
I continued watching as Liliah nodded to the couple she was talking to and then parted ways with them with Jesse at her side. As soon as they took about ten steps, another man approached them and began talking to Jesse. Liliah, possibly feeling left out of the conversation, whispered something in Jesse’s ear and then walked away.
I froze.
She was making her way towards me and I felt the fire inside my chest heighten. I was lost and I didn’t know what to do or where to go. A part of me wished that she’d bump into me and I could wave and be like, ‘hey, long time no see’. Another part of me was screaming, telling me how brainless I was to have come to this stupid engagement party only to be crushed. Liliah was going to live happily, she was going to get married, have children and live a fine life. My being here would only bring disaster, like always.
I sucked in a breath as she came closer. Her fragrance smelled like a field of flowers, reminding me of the day we went to the mall together…But she didn’t notice me, she was too busy waving at the other guests and passed me completely.
I felt my heart sink as her footsteps disappeared behind the curtain of voices. The mission was accomplished, I told myself. I had delivered the gift, I saw her and I knew she was happy. It was done.

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Wifey! I'm home!

Her steps echo off the walls and she wearing her scrubs with a white coat over.
missing a word or one too many, here.

She gotten into a car accident and she’s pregnant,” she says with a deep breath.
she got?

I nod, taking in her information. We bust through the emergency doors and hear the read ambulance scream and whine as the paramedics work on hauling the stretcher out of the red vehicle
red?

With a gulp, I look back at the woman. Her blond hair sticks her sweaty forehead and cheeks and her eyes are squeezed shut in pain.
sticks to her sweaty...

Now bruises of purple stretch underneath my eyes making me look like a zombie
haha. Skins? ;)

“It happens, Lucas. You can’t save everyone, the mother was bleeding beyond control and the traffic made the ambulance late, these little things can a effect a person’s life dramatically
can affect

“I don’t think so. There is an even that I have to attend,” I answer
event?

His little steps instantly go to my fridge and he pries inside, pulling out a slice of pie. “You gonna eat this?”
that's the second story of yours that there's pie involved! haha

What did Blair leave in this morning then?
huh?

“Why do it then? I could just go and drop of the present for you.”
off

My hair is over-combed so I shag it with my fingers quickly, reliving myself of the ‘old guy’ look. I was only twenty-four for goodness sakes.
relieving

She surely caught herself and big fish for that matter. He was a student still in school and on his way to becoming a filthy rich defense lawyer.
a

He was dressed in a black suite with a silver tie. His blond hair matched Liliah’s messy one. How nice, they looked like Romeo and Juliet without the tragic ending.
You reverted to past.

I suck in a breath as she comes closer. Her fragrance smells like field of flowers, reminds me of the day we went to the mall together
either fields of flowers or a field of flowers.

Ooooh! Can't wait to the next one. She's probably not as happy as he thinks! Also, I was beginning to wonder whether Dianne would end up in the hospital, as his patient. But no, a pregnant mother.

Well, I loved this. Boe is an interesting character and I can't wait to read more about them all. It's Luke....BUt not Luke, you know? Oh! I can't wait to see how Lil's has changed!

Great chappy!
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Hey Pink :) I see you've post on the forum haha. Well I am glad :)

She's gotten into a car accident and she’s pregnant,” she says with a deep breath.


Looking down, a pool of red blood stains the white mattress between her legs.

Personally, I would take out the 'blood', but that's just me.

You can’t save everyone, the mother was bleeding beyond control and the traffic made the ambulance late, these little things can a affect a person’s life dramatically.


I nod, watching her turn around the corner


Today, though, I just don’t have the heart. Might want to make a break here The next morning, I’m scurrying scurry around my apartment floor in search of my belt. That belt matchesd specially with the sleek black suit I 'mwas planning on wearing and I don’t want to go out and buy another one. Actually, I just don’t have the time

Just a little of a slip up here.

“So.” He leans back on the couch and observes me as I tornado though the room.


“Alright, don’t get caught” And he makes his way towards the table of paradise with shining eyes and greedy fingers.


I’m lost and I don’t know what to do or where to go.


Her fragrance smells like field of flowers and reminds me of the day we went to the mall together…But she doesn’t notice me, she’s too busy waving at the other guest and passes me completely.


Alrighty, that's all for the nitpicks :)
Overall, I think you're doing great with all of that story. It's really addictive! Keep on writing, I want to know what happens!

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AMAZING, Pinksy 8D Keep them coming.

Keep on writing!
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Yay, new chapter! :D

Nitpicks: (Maybe, the other reviewers have already caught these but, oh well...)

Her steps echo off the walls and she wearing her scrubs with a white coat over.

- Maybe, you meant: '...she is wearing her scrubs with a white coat over.'

Black hair is tied into a small pony tail and her eyebrows pinch, intensifying her emerald eyes.

- I think, you meant: 'Her black hair...'

"...She gotten into a car accident and she’s pregnant”

- I think this should be: 'She has gotten...'

...hear the read ambulance scream and whine...

- Maybe, you meant 'red ambulance'?

(Why do I keep on using 'maybe' and 'I think'? xD)

I had to do it…

- It seems like you missed this one. I think, you meant: 'I have to do it'

She knows how to have an affair with her boss and keep it secretive...

- Didn't you mean: 'and keep it a secret'?

...these little things can a effect a person’s life...

- Typo. Should be: '...things can affect...'

...There is an even that I have to attend,” I answer.

- Typo. Should be: 'There is an event' xD

“Why do it then? I could just go and drop of the present for you.”

- Typo again. Should be: '...and drop off the present for you.'

...reliving myself of the ‘old guy’ look...

- Didn't you mean, 'relieving'?

My eyes scan the area and I try to pin point her location...

- 'pinpoint' is only one word.

I hold back urge to laugh.

- 'I hold back the urge to laugh.'

She surely caught herself and big fish for that matter.

- '...caught herself a big fish...'

Her fragrance smells like field of flowers...

- '...a field of flowers...'

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Hmm...About the present tense narration, I think you had some of it messed up. I'm not sure. I think, this is the first time I've ever read a story written in this tense. Anyway, Luke seemed to have become weak here. Is it because of the years that passed? Basing from his personality 10 years ago, I think Luke wouldn't give in to another girl easily. That's just my opinion anyway. Well, I just think that you have to proofread this chapter. :)

I'll be looking forward to more of Taboo. :)
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I have absolutely no idea how to respond. I never expected it to be so real.... Luke really grew up, he really has different friends. It's a shock... I'm not sure I can wrap my head around the fact that he changed. It's a good beginning. You managed to pull off the present tense. One thing though, pink: you use the word 'hugged' a lot when it comes to clothes.
Good job and keep it up.
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I'm here at last! :D

Is it all right if I don't get all nit-picky? It's just that when I'm not nit-picky, I seem to be able to concentrate on the deeper stuff. I have the attention spam of a dead goldfish, you see, so nit-picking takes up a lot of it... If you'd prefer for me to be nit-picky, juts let me know and I'll do it.

Okay! Anyway, I like this chapter. :) Gaps in novels always entertain me, so I like the fact that you've done the hwole six years later think. What I think you've done very well is Luke's character as a whole. Although it's clear to us that he's changed a bit, he's still Luke. You've managed to tweak his personality a bit without changing it completely, so well done for that. You had some nice descriptions and imagery in here, even though a small minority of them were a little cheesy. The goddess one, for example, but hey! Nothing wrong with that. Besides, I think everything that doesn't involve sarcasm or death is corny... Like usual, Punky dear, your grammar and phrasing was good.

The only grammatical thing I have to bring up only takes a quick look over. Basically, you had a few slip ups where you'd forgotten to change the present tense to past. They're pretty easy to find, so if you give the chapter a quick read over, you should be able to spot the areas where some present tense slips in. I did find the odd awkward phrase... but that might just be me. I'm a simple child, you see. There's nothing noticeably awkward though, so don't worry about it. I'm very impressed with your punctuation, Punk, I must say.

This one's more of a question... What was the prologue about? I was hoping that it would be explained here, but no... For all I know, you might have gotten rid of the prologue now, and if that is the case, then I apologise that this will be no use to you. My mind's a little sketchy, but if I remember correctly, the prologue had Luke in the orphanage six years later talking about some bird or something. I'm not really seeing much of a connection. I will hold back though because there's another pile of chapters that could explain that, but it just now popped into my head... so yeah. I'll bear that in mind. (Do you know that I've been spelling bear like bare for the past fourteen years, nine months? Until now...)

The only real critique I have for you is that I'm a bit confused about something. Luke broke Liliah and Dianne's hearts, right? Well, I'd have thought he did after disappearing. The main point though is that I got the impression that they lost him, therefore, they couldn't keep in touch. If that's the case, how come he's in her engagement party...?
How did they get hold of Luke? In most cases, someone can't just turn up to an engagement party; you have to be invited. If he was invited, then would Liliah really have just ignored him after inviting him? It would be slightly schizophrenic of her.

If she did invite him though, that would be a bit weird in my mind. I mean, it's her engagement party... I'm sure she remembers all that happened with Luke before he left. Out of all of the times she could have chosen to meet back up with him... Her engagement party? I don't know, it just seems a bit unlikely to me. I mean, he could just have snaked in all ninja-like, and she doesn't know that he was going.... but then she would have said something to him, wouldn't she? If she saw him, shed be like WTF?! I doubt she'd just walk past him. Do you see what I'm trying to get at because I'm confusing myself here... I guess there's a chance for you to explain this in the next chapter... but still... It struck me as odd.

Other than that though, I don't see any issues with this chapter. It was a really good one! :D

Keep writing,

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@Whisper: Yeah, time has gone by and Luke has changed. However, he did not give into another girl, he's playing with her. As mentioned, they are friends with special benefits. They just use each other for their own pleasures but there's really nothing deeper between Blair and him.

@ofir: Thanks for pointing that out, I had no idea I did that. XD I have changed it. ^^

@Skins: Whoa, calm your ginger monkeys down, girl man. I know you have a lot of questions regarding how everything is going right now but that's just part of the trick. I will explain the details as we go on with the novel. Also, the prologue will be mentioned in the next Lucas POV chapter. ;) The dove thing will be coming too, don't worry I haven't forgotten about those little things. Liliah was busy, there a crowd and she can't look at everyone at once, therefore she missed him. Also, I apologize for the tense slip ups. I've noticed them in the word document and actually went back to fix them but just haven't editing on YWS yet. I'm waiting if I catch anything more. lol

Thank you everyone for the reviews and comments. They let me know you guys are still reading and enjoying this which makes me want to try even harder to entertain you all. XD

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Amazing.
This story is so real and the foundation is so strong, It can go anywere. I can't believe Luke is all grown up and I know he's still in love with Lilah, I want so badly to find out what's going on in Lilah's mind. Does she really love her lawyer fiance? I think Lilah will have a harder time with her emotions and feelings then Luke because, Luke gave into his feelings in the end and Lilah was still unsure so I think it's going to be very interesting how everything plays out. This story is so addicting! Usually it makes me sad when the characters grow up and years pass but I think your characters need to grow up, the story will be much better now that they are grown.
I hate Blair! I'm sorry but I sense she is going to do something bad in this story, like hurt Lilah. I think Blair is in love with Lucas and people do crazy things when there in love.
Anyways, this story is amazing, please finish it!
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Wow. Great job on this chapter! This story is realistic, like it could happen anytime and anywhere. Please finish it soon, I am eager to read more!!!

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Hey Pink, Shubhi here to review.

There were tears leaking from the corner of her eyes and I knew those weren’t from physical pain but from the thought that she might lose this(her) child.
'her' sounds more nice here since it's her child and you're not going to describe the child as 'this'. It would be more emotional and touching to the readers.

We stepped out casually, like good coworkers should.


So this was a nice read and smooth as always. Gosh, I am tired of saying the same thing. I need to find some new adjectives to suit your writing skills. Okay, so for now I have not got much to say maybe because I am late and others, especially Skins has caught up with all the things one could mention. But I have to disagree with her here-Luke came to the party and that shows that he is still in love with her and wanted to see her once, but had no intentions and I felt this was something only a sad lover could do out of insanity. So in that hole, it was nice. I am just intrigued to know why the hell Hunter's invited and all that. Also, I'd like to see how he is now. I think he'd be a sore loser now stuck up having night shifts at a parking lot. lol, what an imagination. My main critique for this would be that the descriptions were less here and I didn't get the feeling I had expected to get-that of 'wow'. Like God, it's been six years and now their life is all apart, I'd like to see more of memories, flashes or dramas for that matter. I am not sure if I am correct, or even if you're getting me but I don't think it was very good(writing was flawless). A lot could have been done here, the descriptions just pulled this back slightly. Um, what about his girlfriend? I think she could have been shown more here and from what I got-do they live together? She seemed to me like the one poor soul who's going to be left alone. What we had read before, I didn't know that Luke could fall in love with someone else. He seemed like a very cool kind of guy, so what this about the dating? Maybe it's good, but I was just taken aback. :wink:


And as for Lei? I am happy for her, she deserves all good in her life but I just felt a big confusion here. Luke refers to Jesse as a big shot but he's still studying. So is that Jesse's dad a big man or something? Because otherwise just being on the road to become a doctor doesn't make him rich and all, even though there's a chance of him having a bright future but no one an guarantee it, right? That's my main point for him. And I can't believe Lei would marry someone. :( Poor Luke! And yeah, do they both live in the same city because then there are chances that they can bump into each other. Just my imagination working it's way out. Also, I didn't get the feel of how the place they are having the party at look like. Also, you mention that Luke has blue bruises under his eyes from all the late nights, but he's just 24 and he would have become a doctor an year ago probably because it takes maximum of 6 years to be specialized. Or maybe of studying late at night Just wondering. Apart from this I don't have much to say but to add in more descriptions here and all the other stuff. Also, in the upcoming chapters tell us how Luke managed to study and afford to pay his tuition fees for Med. School, coz' that's one thing I believe is impossible for some with parents also. So please give it a realistic approach.

Apart from this I am fine by this and go on writing before you lose interest altogether. :)

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This story is actually amazing! :O
I've been hooked on it since the first chapter xD
I love the way this whole story has developed. The first part was so emotional, it explained everything and then reading over the second part we just sort of get the sense of what's going to happen. I like the way you gave us an insight of how much Lucas has changed- his new job as a doctor and trying to save the life of a child, and of course the fling with Blair. I also LOVE the way there's a big dilemma with the fact that Liliah is engaged but Lucas loves her xD
I REALLY want to know how this ends :D So I hope you finish this :P
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