In The Storm

Hehehe... Hello! Here's another poem! Life is wonderful because God is beautiful!

In the middle of the storm,
I opened my Bible and prayed
For words that could make this heart feel safe
Philippians 4:6, like a candle in the dark
I got down on my knees,
Prayed again and cried

Jesus knows me better than me,
He knows what I can handle right now
and I've heard so many times before
He would never put me through something I can't

I got up and I smiled for Him
Took my Bible off the floor
Wiped those tears full of fear,
Laughed and said "Wow! I'm strong"

Great poem, only one fix up.

Took the bible off the floor

Should sound better.

Good job anyways.

I liked this poem. And yes you can do it. Jesus will always be there to guide you, and he would never put you through something that he didnt think you could handle. You are never alone in Christ(:. Beautiful poem.

Hi Solvalery,
Again another great poem! Not to into the religion issue, but i understood the meaning. =D
Cant wait to see more!

Lovely. This poem has truth within each line.
just on thing..
Did you mean-

"..something I can't handle.."

?? i was just wondering.

Wow...I loved this poem. It was awesome and beautiful.

He would never put me through something I can't do?

Hey, Sol! Just a wee nitpick for you. Other than that, this was very simple and nice. keep writing for Jesus!!


Always In Christ,
Jash ♥

Not a bad poem. Only one problem: God doesn't exist.

I have one word for you: Wow.

This is really a great poem and I'm lovin' it xD. The message is epic. *thumbs up all the way to Heaven*

My only suggestion is that you capitalize the first letter of the word 'bible'. xD

To Periablo: How can you prove that He does not exist? None can prove it the same way none can prove that He does exist. The term is as general as the terms 'fate', 'destiny', 'prophecy', 'psychic', 'chi', and etc.

Hehehe! Thanks people! xD And Perdiablo, I believe in God by Faith!

Very nice writing here. I especially like the reference to the specific verse in the Bible. I'm a strong Catholic, so I appreciate a good show of faith. Very nice imagery. Keep loving Christ, and he'll keep taking care of you.
If you don't mind, I would very much appreciate it if you could read my short story Ghosts That Linger and comment. Thank you very much, and keep writing!
- HIGHWHITESOCKS

That's a really great poem. I liked how you used an example of where you opened it to.

Wow! I love it! So simple yet so powerful! This is just something I would do, but I would put in a little doubt. Fear that that maybe God has given me something more than I can handle, and then the relief. But overall beauiful work!

In the middle of the storm,
I opened my Bible and prayed
For words that could make this heart feel safe
Philippians 4:6, like a candle in the dark
I got down on my knees,
Prayed again and cried
Jesus knows me better than me,I know myself
He knows what I can handle right now
and I've heard so many times before
He would never put me through something I can't
I got up and I smiled for Him
Took my Bible off the floor
Wiped those tears full of fear,
Laughed and said "Wow! I'm strong"

I like how simple this poem is, and I don't think you have to be religious to appreciate the idea behind it. I think it's very inspirational, and I'd go as far as saying that it could be something that people turn to and read when they're feeling like they can't cope, and realise that whether we believe in God or not, we are all strong human beings and we really can handle more than we think. It flowed well, the rhyming was good, and I really enjoyed it. Well done.

Alright, I have some critiquing to do so lets start. This is a well written poem with a good idea behind it, and I like that you decided to write about what you believe in. I don't really see many people doing that, and I like the poem for that. This poem is very well written and explained and the words flowed very smoothly and clearly, and I managed to pick up the message you were putting out when you decided to write this. This is a great poem and I think you should write more.

Your critiquing friend, Tyler.