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Stress is taking over me
what an effect
so dried out so exhausted
just like a cigarette about to finish
I need to scream,laugh, cry
what a state of confusion
finding myself like this
too proud to ask for help
dignity it's my curse
I need to scream,laugh,cry
so many hours staring at the pc screen
no more ideas
Stress is taking over me
talking nonsense
trying to find any reason to smile
this is crazy you would say
being wrapped in my own world
trying to search for some peace
some distraction
looking for answers
they might be right in front of me
thinking it's hard
I need a dream

Hi, Iamnotperfect. I'm Freak...Heehee.

I love this poem and I can seriously relate to it, but every great piece needs editing! Nitpicks:

*Make sure to capitalize the beginning of all your sentences!

Stress is taking over me (Period)
what an effect (Period)
so dried out (Comma) so exhausted (Comma)
just like a cigarette about to finish (Period)
I need to scream,lough "Laugh", cry (Period)
what a state of confusion (Hyphen)
finding myself like this (Comma)
too proud to ask for help (Period)
dignity (Colon) it's my curse (Period)
I need to scream,lough "Laugh",cry (Period)
so many hours staring at the pc I'd suggest to capitalize "PC" since it is an abbreviation screen (Semi - colon)
no more ideas (Period)
Stress is taking over me (Comma)
talking nonsense (Comma)
trying to find any reason to smile (Period)
this is crazy Try to make it obvious that someone is speaking. Try italicizing it or even put in quotation marks - after all, someone is speaking you would say (Comma)
being wrapped in my own world (Comma)
trying to search for some peace (Comma)
some distraction (Period)
looking for answers (Semi - colon)
they might be right in front of me (Period)
thinking (Colon) it's hard (Period)
I need a dream (Period)

Phew! Anyway, you had a lot of punctuation mistakes, and that is kind of important to make the story. If you need more help on punctuation though visit: http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/marks/marks.htm. I go there all the time!
*Note: Some of my corrections may not be 100% bullet proof, so I apologize in advance.

Good job though over all, I enjoyed reading it. Write on and PM me for anything.

Hi, thanks for the grammar corrections although I wasn't planning to put any punctuations I just wanted to express the way I felt on the moment, next time I'll make sure to proof read it