A place to get away

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When the days drag on
And the birds won't sing
When it's dark all the time
And you're caught in the wind

There's a place you can go
Far away from it all
Just close your eyes
And let yourself fall

You will land in a place
Where the sun shines bright
Where the grass is always green
And the clouds fluffy and white

Where children sing
And teenagers smile
Where the most dangerous thing
Is a marshmallow pile

Where the rainbows are full
And the flowers smell nice
Where Christmas comes early
It's all sugar and spice

If you're crying at night
And your work is your play
Let yourself go
Let it take you away
We all have moments of desperation, but if we face them head on, that's when we find out just how strong we really are. - Mary-Alice Young, Desperate Housewives




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smashles, i hate you! ;) joking! Love the poem! Great flow, and the rhyme works really well here, and the end leaves you on the edge of your seet :D it's good to see that your actually trying this year !
hope you do well.
-rainbowbubbleXx




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Good poem! Good flow too. This is really nice. I'd like to go there myself just to see what it's like. I don't know if it's more like Neverland or Heaven (not that I'm super religious or anything) that's just what it seems like.

Good hopeful poem. Keep writing the good stuff! :D
Any man can handle adversity, to test a man's character give him power - Abraham Lincoln

To be the greatest is when everything before you is obsolete, and everything after you bears your mark. - ?




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its a great poem. it has a good flow.
1.i loved the way you started with pessimism but ended with optimism.
keep writing




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I like it.
It reminds me of a song I have written.
I think this poem is darker than what it seems on the surface. Did you think about what "let yourself fall" and "let it take you away" means?
I don't know if you purposefully did this but it seems like you are suggesting either killing yourself or making up a pretend world... It kinda reminds me of Katherine from Desperate Housewives. You know how she's all lonely so she pretends she's with Mike.
But most likely you just meant sometimes it's ok to imagine everything's good.
Love your sister! :)

PS I likethe Christmas line.
If I die young
bury me in satin
lay me down on a bed of roses
sink me in the river, at dawn
send me away with the words of a love song
<3



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