Right, so. I didn't feel anything. I want to feel the emotions in your characters. Describe the setting and your characters. I honestly want to feel everything thats going on. Provide a backstory. How long have they been together, when did they meet? was it love at first sight? Your grammar and spelling are good
Write On ~WickedWonder
'We will never believe again, kick drum beating in my chest again, oh, we will never believe in anything again, preach electric to a microphone stand.'
I liked it a lot. It shows the actual struggles of an american teen mom and the father not wanting a part of it. It brings out who these people really are and what they really want.
Keep up the good work!
Charlotte Grace
"The secret to staying young is to live honestly, eat slowly, and lie about your age." -Lucille Ball
