Demented Love

Dearest love of my life, may the human words ever learn to describe the smallest things about you? I don't know why, but you feel like home, one sweet home I shall never learn to leave.

Let the days and nights forget us this moment, for we are not coming back tonight. I want to spend the rest of my life gazing at your angelic smile... I want nothing from this life, this entire universe, but you! You have become my everything, every smile, every tear; every laugh, and every cry.

You my irrational desire, are beyond perfect. You my beautiful insane sin, are everything I have ever beseeched for. I keep on asking you why you were made so amazingly impeccable, and all you say is that you simply are not. All you say is that I am the one who is perfect.

You make me feel so precious and loved... Then how may I not want to contend for this love? How may I ever learn to turn my back and walk away? I may not ever stop chasing you, no matter how far you go, and I may not ever stop offering you everything you want in me.

My love, in my loneliest moments, your soul never leaves, and your face never fades away. Your guarding whispers embrace me everytime I break to tears, and your addicting touch heals my wounds everytime I turn weak.

You never let me fall, you are always ready to grab me and guide my way... I just love you!

Hello Foxy. I think I might've blushed a bit when I typed that. Anyway, on to the review before I can embarrass myself any further.

Dearest love of my life... May the human words ever learn to describe the smallest things about you?

If you are meaning to write this in a letter format, the ellipses - the dots which I put in bold - need to be replaced with a comma. , and there also needs to be an indent inserted before you state the first sentence. Now, if you don't want this in a letter format, the ellipses should still be replaced with a comma and the 'M' in "May" should be lowercased. The ellipses really serve no purpose and bring about an unnatural pause.

I want nothing from this life, this entire universe, but you!

You just missed a comma, nothing to fret about.

You have become my everything, every smile, every tear, every life, and every cry.

There needs to be a full stop where I put the first bold. Either a semicolon or a period would due just fine. The way you have it structured now, it would be a run-on sentence. In reference to the last two bolds, you are being repetitive. 'Tear' and 'Cry' are both generally the same thing. It is like saying "Every smile, every laugh, every life, and every chuckle." Chuckle and laugh are both basically the same thing. And even now, while I'm reading it over again, I see that "every life" really does not make much sense. She only has one life. I suggest switching "life" to something along the lines of "breath".

You, my irrational desire, are beyond perfect.

If you are using "my irrational desire" in replace for his name, you need to treat it as if you were actually saying "You, Anthony, are beyond perfect." I am in no way saying his name is Anthony, that name was just a fill in.

You, my beautiful insane sin, are everything I have ever beseeched for.

Same wrong thing here as above.

This was sweet to read and very heartwarming - in my eyes. Though short, I feel I got a really good idea of how your main character feels towards this man. I must say the ending seemed a bit rushed and forced, but, all in all, I was glad to have read this.

Ta-ta.