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She's Not Me.

MikaFreak123 · 2010-10-09T05:07:04Z

She never trips, Only dances. She can walk on ice, Fire, water and glass. Nothing will hurt her, But maybe something will. At last. Why can't you see? That girl is not me. Why can't you see? That girl is not me.---- A touch, a little feeling. Something she does not want. But I crave for each and everyday. But cry as I will, and cry as she don't. We aren't meant to be.--- Somewhere inside, I know my true colors will show. Somewhere inside, I know I'm bleeding out again.--- But she won't let you see a thing. Why can't you see? That girl is not me. Why can't you see? That girl is not me.---- Oh.. How can I begin to tell myself, Who I really am, And it's not her----. I know now, that I can't hide myself. Hide myself from me. Why can't you see? That girl is not me. Why can't you see? That girl is not me.---- Oh.. Why can't you see? That girl is not me. Why can't you see, why can't you? Why can't you see she's not me? At all----.

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Mon Feb 14, 2011 6:10 am

telle_04 says... · Mon Feb 14, 2011 6:10 am

okay so they say dashes drive them mad. me too.
i understand that you used the dashes to convey emotion, but honestly, it's not appropriate. i'm also thinking that it was nice, after all, but it might well be suited under lyric poetry. i can't really feel the song element in it.

PM me for anything.

You've got the key to my heart..but have you forgotten about a duplicate?
Sorry. I've already given it to someone else.

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Words are pale shadows of forgotten names. As names have power, words have power. Words can light fires in the minds of men. Words can wring tears from the hardest hearts.
— Patrick Rothfuss, The Name of the Wind

She's Not Me.

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