all a war with love

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Well if you read my other piece 'gimme what I want', then this will hint on what happened after that song. Alot did happen and I put into song format but I haven't made it blunt and easy to figure out what exactly happen because I mean, that's the story, not the emotions and this song is emotions and thoughts. I hope you like it because I just finished this moments before posting it here. Enjoy.

P.S the name sucks in my opinion and I would like you to think of a fitting name, thank you ^ ^

‘‘You think you’re so-oh cunning
But you don’t know what is coming
You want to make a stand
But you don’t even have a plan’’
yet that doesn’t even matter
Put it in the latter, climbing this ladder
To my own little heaven
[instrumental crash then pause]
Wait no, I gotta stay here
[starts up again, all instruments build up for chorus]

Chorus
Cause the fight is for something grand
Why does love need to be planned
Sometimes it needs to be sudden
Especially when the heart is sunken
I’m not gonna stay broken
Never take the painful token

[chorus’s tune but less extrovert, more ambient with guitar riffs]
These people wrecked my life
But I’m still standing right here
They’ve taken my love. My dear
But I got to be sincere
I won’t ever give up
don’t have the liberty
When my friends need me

When I see that girl, with my enemy
It cuts so deep, why did she hurt me
I thought I did everything
I stood by her, when they went and hurt her
But now she’s with them
The ones lied about me, the ones that left mollie
Mollie loves them, now~

[guitar whines then everything builds up again]
Chorus

[militant drumming with a riff and bass line to suit the theme. Bass drum is slammed after the end of each sentence]
Some days I feel like a soldier
Cause my friends get shot down, or stake me in the back
I keep on fighting, to stay alive
Pushing these bullets out, from my torn up heart
But I still got my closest friends
And we will tear them apart

[the drumming builds up, like a heart beat then opens into the chorus]
Chorus

[quieter, the closure to instrumental bars i.e. summing up verse followed by then end chorus which should be more of a reverb or delay effect to it]
Now what am I saying, right~ now
Well it’s that I will stand for my friends
I love them more than myself
Stick for till bitter end
don’t care what happens to me now-

Chorus [closing]
Last edited by jake457 on Sun Oct 03, 2010 1:24 pm, edited 1 time in total.




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First of all, I enjoyed this a lot. You're an awesome song writer by the way!

jake457 wrote:Some days I feel like a soldier
Cause my friends get shot down, or stake me in the back
I keep on fighting, to stay alive
Pushing these bullets out, from my torn up heart
But I still got my closest friends
And we will tear them apart


Personally, this is my favorite part. It's an awesome comparison on your part and it sounds awesome.

Nice ryhmes also, just wanted to tell you that.

Lovely lyrics! : )

~Kenzie ~




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hello jake.
i don't have that talent for suggesting titles though, but i love this piece. you have a band or something? that would be good then. i can see the emotion, feel the pain in your piece. keep writing.

enuf said. :)
You've got the key to my heart..but have you forgotten about a duplicate?
Sorry. I've already given it to someone else.




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thanks guys :), and telle, im planning to write a song with my friend sometime if that sounds good, but I used to be in a band and we almost had a recording deal but things change :L. But yeh, thanks :) this song is kind of important to me so it means alot for you to like it.



Poetry is a phantom script telling how rainbows are made and why they go away.
— Carl Sandburg