The adventures of the geek.

I never thought I'd write poetry before but guess what, I did! Its nothing deep or meaningfull its just something I wanted to write. Enjoy




I got beat up
My glasses are gone
I'm wandering down the hall
Thinking what have I done?

I got brave
I stuck up for myself
The bullies got mad
Bashed me against the bookshelf

It's time for Gym
I have to get there soon
I can barely see
And it's already half past noon

The locker rooms are near
I can hear the shower
I wish I could stay away
I'd do anything in my power

I walk down the hall
And approach the door
I step in and wish
I looked at the sign on the door

Curse my missing glasses
I wish I could see
Because in this predicament
I wouldn't be

Now I know why
I smelt perfume
Because I just walked into
The girl’s locker room

"Bashed me against the bookshelf "

I don't know why but... bookshelf made it seem out of rhythm. Just shelf would be good I suppose.

I don't know if this was supposed to be humourous, if you were in the point of view of a guy walking blindedly into the girls locker room, but I thought this was going to be a serious poem...

Um... the rhyming was kind of bad, but other than that, you should expand on this a little bit... A lot bit.

Hehe!!! I thought this was fun. I don't like to over analyze things so this is short. But I loved the twist at the end... cute. I didn't see it coming. I probably should have. Oh well! One thing I did notice though, what how could he know that it was half past noon if he can barely see? Good job though!

hey that was a good poem and it was funny in a cute way -->lol does that make sense? good job!

heh. funny.

um, the rhyming's forced and the rhythm is off in various places, but i'm not going to be picky because of i understand that this was just a little ditty you knocked together. cute. really.

That was good, and it was quite funny at the end. You should write more funny poetry. I -as well as many others I'm sure- would enjoy that alot.

Keep up the good writing:D

Wow I really like your poem, especially the ending. The rhyming is off in a few in a few places but it's not very bad. I really like how you hinted at the ending saying you wished you had looked at the sign on the door. The ending was funny. Great Job!

I like it, It's quirky and cute, some of the rhyming is a bit questionable.

I assume it's suppose to be lighthearted and not too serious, althought when I first started reading I thought it was! hehe, Until I got on a bit and saw that it was more funny and cutesy.

This made me smile though

Look forward to reading some more

Star xx

I walk down the hall

And approach the door

I step in and wish

I looked at the sign on the door

its good except for that part, the "I step in and wish" part I wouldn't put it there, it just doesn't fit. Now if you put in "I step in" it might make sense but if I were you, I'd find something different to put there.

Keep up the good writing

xoxo,
Jump

I liked it. The twist at the end was good, and the ryhming was okay. It was pretty good, seeing as you just randomly put it together, but the title confused me a bit, but for a geek i guess it was an adventure. overall, cute and quirky. You are right - it isn't deep but poetry doesn't have to be like that. Heck, I read one once about how to find a fairy apple tree man.

I think you told the story very well. I like the theme and you ended it perfectly. Good job, keep writing!

Ohh and haha! Our state is bigger than "yall's"

Hi.
I liked your poem.
It rings true to the life of a 'geek' and I love the title! It's inticing!

Now I'm in a bit of a catch 22 here as I loved the way you made it ryhme and kept it relevent to the poem (That's a hard skill to master you know!) but, at the same time, I'm thinking that maybe the rhyme was aq bit forced.
Maybe try writing the poem in a non-rhyming way and see if you like it.

But, hey, that's just my personal opinion.
Thanks for the read,
Woozey