My comments in pinkish fonts.
kikialicia31 wrote:How could you,
Leave me alone,
Crying ,
Without any love?
How could you,
Think I'm happy,
With this kind of life,
Surrounded by lies?
How could you,
Create such hurtful lies,I just feel like repeating "lies" was kind of distracting.
And take away,
All my happiness?
How could you,
Do such a thing as,
Break my heart,
When it's already in a thousand pieces?
This is quite a sad poem. The sentence highlighted above is all that I could criticize really, 'Cause it's already such a nice poem. Keep it up, girl!
