Hey ryan!
First of all, thank you for rhyming. There are not enough poems on YWS that rhyme. (in my opinion) The flow was nice, but I don't like that you broke you rhyming pattern at the end. This is my own weird poetry quirk: I don't care if you break the rhyming pattern as long as it isn't in the last stanza. It's weird, I know. The last line is great, but it would be made stronger if it followed your preset pattern.
Overall, clear theme and great rhyming pattern (with the exception of the end)
Write On!
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