never to believe

i dont belive
any thing you say
it to painfull to think
that i was in love with you
never to be again
you are not worth the tears
worth the sleepless nights
i cant believe
i waste so much time
so many tears
never to believe
never to love
forever and ever
that's what i thought about you and me
all was lies
to destroy me
baby i said you were the one
how was i mistaken
I'm
never to believe
you
I'm no longer there
I'm out of the picture
i hate you
unbearable hate
so good bye
to your ungrateful self

Hello and welcome to YWS!
This poem is very loose, and though punctuation is not necessary, spell check really helps with grammar.

I don't believe
anything you say
It's (or "It is") too painful (one "l") to think
that I was in love with you
never to be again
you are not worth the tears
worth the sleepless nights
I can't believe
I waste so much time
so many tears
never to believe
never to love
forever and ever
that's what I thought about you and me
all of it was lies
to destroy me
baby I said you were the one
how was I mistaken (I'm not sure if this was supposed to be a question. If not, "how I was" fits better)
I'm
never to believe ("I will never believe you" makes more sense, and "never to believe" made more sense when you used it before, anyway)
you
I'm no longer there
I'm out of the picture
I hate you
unbearable hate
so good bye
to your ungrateful self

So, like I said, this poem is very loose. I'm not saying that's bad, though. In my opinion, I don't feel any great meaning in this poem, though from your words the point you're trying to make is clear. Your words run together at times and parts are a little like a rant. Maybe if you put in something that told more of what happened to cause the hate and emotions in this poem I wouldn't feel like I'm skimming over a story and reading something a little unclear.
Sorry if I'm being too harsh or anything, but I just think you could add a few things to this poem so it becomes clearer.
Keep working and I hope I helped maybe a tiny little bit in some way

I think simplycomplex got it right with saying that it sounded kind of ranting...you got your emotions across but didn't give us a taste of what you were feeling or reason to sympathize with you. There was just a certain depth that lacked, which makes poetry lose its real point, because poetry is all about the essence of emotion. If I were to give you any suggestions, it would be to really dig into yourself, heart and mind both invested, and to really expand emotions into a unique and fresh way that's still relateable. It's not easy, but it's what makes great poetry. I can't tell you how many times I've seen what are almost clones of this poem.
Keep writing,
StoryWeaver

I liked this. It really captured the hatred you feel. They were some pretty strong, raw feelings. You usually don't get a lot of emotion from a short poem, but in here I did. However, it was a bit too strong.
"I'm
never to believe
you "
A tad bit choppy.
But keep on writing.

Ello there...

Sorry to say but it was hard to keep reading... Not because the poem itself was bad, but because the grammar was not good... I read some of the reviews above, and yeah, just follow those and you should be good... Sorry! Don't hate me! I see your new so, we here at YWS like to read through our work and fix any grammar and spelling mistakes in advance! Again don't hate me... please? :'( Keep writing! It wasn't a bad poem, I think you let your emotions get a little too involved, but besides that and and the spelling/grammar it was nice.