Joseph

Joseph

From day one, I knew you were something special.
The truth spoke through your eyes.
It taught me confidence,
It showed me truth.

Together we learned how big the world really is,
leaving me with goals.
Sometimes a picture can't capture a moment,
and sometimes a song can't always explain,
but there's relation
And you happened to be more than a dream.

You gave me strength to believe,
strength to see,
strength to reach for the stars,
but most of all,
you gave a heart.
A heart full of everything.

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I like this poem, not just because it's my namesake. It's got a lot of heart and it's very well written, if a little short.

Some things I noticed:

It taught my confidence,

Should be "It taught me confidence,"

but there's relation

I think there is supposed to be an a between "there's" and "relation."

It looks like you dropped a few words, the best way to counter that particular error is to read it aloud.

Overall, I liked the poem,

Kat Jackson wrote:Joseph

From day one, I knew you were something special.
The truth spoke through your eyes.
It taught myme confidence,
It showed me truth. hmmmm so the truth in Joseph's eyes showed you truth?

Together we learned how big the world really is,
leaving me with goals. I don't get these two lines. Well I get the first one, but I don't get the second one or how they relate to the rest of the poem. Please expand.
Sometimes a picture can't capture a moment,
and sometimes a song can't always explain,
but there's a relation
And you happened to be more than a dream. So songs and pictures remind you of who Joseph really is?

Sorry my comments are really just questions, but I guess I am still trying to understand how each couplet works together and what the poem is about. I really think you should expand this. You should also think about what your focus is. Right now you seem to be all over the place adding a thought hear putting something cut there.

Hope I helped,

A. S.