Prolouge: Dead Love

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So I wrote a poem first and then the prolouge to go with it.

When love an hate
awaken the dead
the world will be silent.

The birds will not sing,
the wind will not whisper,
and life's breath will halt.

The judgement they will pass.
The verdict will decide,
if love will prevail, or if it shall die.


Two families...
The Crow and Fade families live in a world where magic exists, creatures of fiction come to life, and emotions run stronger than ever. Especially love and hate.

An eternal hate...
As the two families feud over ruling the land of Alia, their hate festers. The ever-peaceful land is on the brink of war.

One forbidden love...
Hannah Fade and Jesse Crow meet. Oblivious to each other's identity, in their short encounters, the two begin to fall in love.
But once the truth comes out, you can't put it back in. And the sparks that fly, both of love and hate, might be loud enough to awaken the dead.
When you turn to face the sun, all of the shadows fall behind you.
I used to be Writer97 but that was boring so I changed it. PandaRawr is more me.




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This prologue reminds me of Romeo and Juliet. It doesn't sound very original, to be frank, and i don't think this is a story i would particularly want to read because i've read so many others like it. You should add an interesting flair, maybe have a third family, and have a girl in that family also fall in love with the guy, or something original. I'm not very good with writing love stories, so i couldn't really give you any suggestions, but i hope you can figure it out! good luck! hope this helps. =)
Xx This side of mortality is
scaring me to death
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Whoa! This is deep. I agree with Torigirl15!You should edit ehat she mentioned. This is great, I hope you write more
Keep Writing!
Nike:)
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