Sorry, but this is about you

Hi EishaM! I don't have that great an aptitude when it comes to lyrics, but I'll give it a try ...

I can't really comment on the meter, because I don't know how the song is supposed to sound. I like the fact that when I read it, I could sort of feel the beat. I might recommend putting something in italics at the top of the page, saying whether it's meant to be pop, R&B, country, rock, or whatever, and state the tempo (moderately fast, slow, etc.). It might even help to put crescendo or decrescendo in some places, just to give the reader a better feel for the song.

EishaM wrote:She wants a liar as her best friend
Doesn’t wanna know what her deal is
Her smile needs those lies
What can you say when your honesty regrets
Wasting words on someone who couldn’t digress
Away from her own lies

I'm not sure about the word "as" in the first line here. How about "to be" or "for"? Also, you said "lies" twice here. I'm not sure if the repetition is intended, but if it isn't, try "fibs" or some other synonym.

Anyway, you did a great job! I applaud you for even being able to write lyrics; I surely can't. Good luck!

Hey I really love you're song i wouldn't change a thing it has a really good rhythm and the words are creative, unique, deep but still able to be understood. i know sometimes good feedback is bad because it doesn't help you improve but i really have nothing bad to say at all. Maybe make it a little longer. Now that i look back at it i might say that i didn't really understand what it was generally about, but hey a lot of good songs are like that. Just make sure you have a good melody and viola, perfect song. Keep writing songs like this

Thats okay Thats what this is about after all