me without you

It's just you and me and there's no one around
Feel like I'm hanging by a thread,And it's a long way down
I've been trying to breath but I'm fighting for air
I'm always low with no place to go
But you're always there when everything falls apart

And it seems like the world is crashing at my feet
You like me the best when I'm a mess
When I'm my own worst enemy

You make me feel beautiful
When I have nothing left to prove
And I can't imagine how I'd make it through
When there's no me without you
No me without you

You hear what I say when I don't say a word
You are my rising sun,you're the place I run
You know how it hurts when everything falls apart

And it seems like the world is crashing at my feet
You like me the best when I'm a mess
When I'm my own worst enemy

You make me feel beautiful
When I have nothing left to prove
And I can't imagine how I'd make it through
When there's no me without you
No me without you

tamtam97 wrote:It's just you and me and there's no one around
Feel like I'm hanging by a thread,And it's a long way down
I've been trying to breath but I'm fighting for air
I'm always low with no place to go
But you're always there when everything falls apart

And it seems like the world is crashing at my feet
You like me the best when I'm a mess
When I'm my own worst enemy

You make me feel beautiful
When I have nothing left to prove
And I can't imagine how I'd make it through
When there's no me without you
No me without you

You hear what I say when I don't say a word
You are my rising sun, space you're the place I run
You know how it hurts when everything falls apart

And it seems like the world is crashing at my feet
You like me the best when I'm a mess
When I'm my own worst enemy

You make me feel beautiful
When I have nothing left to prove
And I can't imagine how I'd make it through
When there's no me without you
No me without you

This was a really touching song and I enjoyed it because...
A) It was well written and I could imagine someone singing it and
B) There were NO errors

Hello, Tamtam.

I don't know how to really review songs but I'll try my best.

First of all, this was really good, but I wish I had something to compare the tempo to. Is this country, pop, rap, rock, or alternative? If you could just provide what genre this fits into, it would make this just that much better.

Secondly, this is spaced out just a bit too much. Put all the, er, stanzas, - I've no idea what to call them - together. Another thing that worried me was that there was no punctuation.

Well, I've nothing more to say. This was really good!

ReisePiecey!

Its country pop!!...btw thnx for the help

Hey! So, just a few things.

The line "I'm been trying to breath, but I'm fighting for air" should be "I'm trying to breathE, but I'm fighting for air".

The line "I'm always low with no place to go" confuses me a little. What do you mean by it? It also stalls the flow of the song a little, because it's so short compared to the other lines.

Lastly, make this longer. It seems somewhat short to me and I think you could make this longer by adding another verse or a bridge. You have a solid chorus. Just add a little more.