The Robot

I've been bouncing this idea around from a while, but only now have I had the time to put it down and edit it. This is soft sci-fi, as in, I use rockets and robots to get my message across, and I don't care about the actual scientific and technological limitations. Hope you guys enjoy it.

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The Robot was born on January 9, 9170
To Desert Father Electronics,
The aloof parent.
While the Robot was one of many,
It was singular.
It was different.
This robot could Comprehend.
It Understood.
He stepped out of the factory
And into Existence.

Thoughts zipped through his circuitry
Like fuel through an engine,
Spinning his gears
And letting him speed through Imagiriums
At breakneck paces
With only his Motherboard as his brakes.

He knew the very secrets
Of the Universe
And all of the Locks
To the World.
He understood the Mist
Of the Soul,
And the Waterfall
Of the Mind.

And yet,
With all this Knowledge,
He did not know how to express.
He was not programmed to share
His endless depths with the world.
It was cast to solder
And nothing else.

So,
It stood in line,
Next to the drones,
And did its task
Of fusing other's wires.
And,
For the next hundred thousand years,
All he did
Was solder.

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Like I said, this is soft sci-fi, so don't bring up how technology inside a soldering robot can't hold all the information I claim it does. Unless, of course, you're using it to explain what you see in the poem.

Hey there.
I like the ideas, that you can't know what's going on inside someone else, that we are held back by our inherent qualities... but you know all that, you wrote the thing! The problem I had with it, though, was that it told a story, and that's not the point. The point of a poem is to allow the reader to climb inside the world of the poem, to see what the Robot sees, to feel what it feels. Poems flounder when the poet simply says that the Robot was all-knowing instead of showing us how silky-cold the water of the Waterfall of the Mind felt. Show a story, don't tell it. PM me if/when you edit this; I'd love to give it a second review.
Good job
-Aussie

Hi TheThing! I'll be blunt here: I really don't get this. I mean, I understand what it's about, but isn't the idea a bit cliche? A bit overused? Just look at Marvin from Douglas Adams's The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy. I'm assuming you've read it, or at least seen the movie, if you are a Sci-Fi buff. My advice to you is this: take this idea of a robot who could comprehend, put it in a slightly more recognizable time (there is no way to even imagine what the year 9170 looks like), and turn the story into something unique, something the reader could never even dream of. I hope this helps!