Well, as it's a PDF, it's fairly difficult for me to nitpick this. I'll just have to give you a general review, but you'll get a more specific kind of critique if you can work it into BB code, as fun as I'm sure that would be.
I'm not keen on the style you use here. Even for a letter, it's too formal and phrases like "mere season back" do nothing to appeal to the reader. I'd make sure you don't go over the top with the letter writing here and consider whether the prologue is actually necessary. Yes, it's intriguing, but I don't think it adds anything. Your story can surely speak for yourself without relying on a prologue to draw the reader in.
There are a few grammatical errors which I'd like to correct, but I'm not typing out the prologue, so I'll just stick to generalising. You tend to add unnecessary words, such as "exactly" at the end of one sentence and the single "but it was". You also overuse em dashes and semi-colons. Again, it strikes me that this is predominantly intended to create interest, and you're using every trick at your disposal to draw the reader in. The letter doesn't flow and the reader feels insulted because you're addressing him/her (well, essentially the reader) in quite a condescending manner. Personally, I don't like being out of the loop, and it doesn't draw me in so much as irritate me.
Having said that, I can't deny that this is intriguing and I want to read more. I think that you should attempt to establish that in the first chapter, rather than rely on a prologue to back up what should be your opening, instead.
Good luck in continuing with this and I hope to see more posted in future!
Thanks, Jet. Part of the reason I posted it was that I wanted to know if it did in fact hold a relevant place within the overall story.
Chapter I and II are already posted if you'd like to go ahead and read that... and since I realize it would make things easier, I'll go ahead and try to find the time to bbc it.
»Sam.
"The power of accurate obeservation is often called cynicism by those who haven't got it." - Oscar Wilde.
If I could only see right to the end, I'd know just where to begin, and I could put together all the little pieces.
EH B1 Prologue.pdf