Citrus Mist

Citrus Mist

Dig in your thumbnail
And peel off the skin
Juice flows from the fruit
As the skin cracks
And a citrus mist
Is released into the air
Filling your nostrils
With a strong Florida scent
The fruit is bare
Its bright wedges
Smiling at you
You pull them apart
And bite into one
Its succulent taste
The sweet and sour flavor
Juices melting your mouth
And Florida invades
Down in your throat
The citrus mist everywhere



Just a fun little poem.

i'm real sorry but I just don't seem to get the rythem here..

I like the topic tough...

purdy.

wow, i never thought of an orange like this before... let's try it!
*sticks knife into orange* *orange juice squirts into my face* AHH MY EYES MY EYES!

beautiful poem yoha. Very.

-Mouth waters-
Brilliant descriptions there, better imagery than I could ever pull!
But agreed with Chandni13: I didn't quite get the rhythm either...

Also, caught this typo:

Filling you nostrils

Other than that, nice work. : )

This was a good poem... I don't even like orange juice, so that's saying something.

beautiful. really. uh...no constructive critizism.
in fact, us poets' should all learn a bit from you to write about the more simple things in life.


i don't even LIKE oranges!

I'm not good with poetry, but I wanted to tell you I enjoyed it. And I love oranges. They're sweet and tangy at the same time. Have you ever been to Florida and had fresh orange juice? It's wonderful!

This is my favorite part:

Its bright wedges
Smiling at you

I like the imagery there. Creative.

~Jacquie~

Aw, this makes me smile! It's cute, I like it. It's nice to see something that isn't horribly depressing and morbid. Personally, I think happiness is harder to do! Well done!

Oh wow, thanks guys. Haha... what rhythm? I have no rhythm. What is this "rhythm" you speak of? Yeah, but really, I am rhythm-less. This was a fun poem for me though. I actually though of the first few lines in Science class while spacing out at the ceiling... but yeah. I don't even like oranges that much either. I don't eat them if I don't have to, I let my mom eat my Christmas orange we get in our stockings. But I remebered when I was younger, I was peeling an orange with my thumb and the morning light in the windows caught it just right, and I could see this weird mist stuff come out of it whenever you broke the skin. Try it sometime. Citrus mist does exist! Muahahaha! But yeah, I tried to make this about any citrusy fruit really. Lemons, limes, oranges, but I admit, it really is about an orange. Duh. Glad you all liked it!
~Yoha