Inside the Mind of a 7-year-old Romantic

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"Umm, I think Genevieve is here." I said to my teacher, Mrs. Martin.

There should be a comma inbetween "Teacher" and "Mrs. Martin."

"Honey, Genevieve doesn't come 'till the end of the day," she replied.

The period should also become a comma if you're intending on using a lower case S for "She" afterwards.

Overall:
The story was a bit too short, and kind of pointless, though it was good considering you're a seven year old, but only because you're a seven year old. If I had not known of the age of the person submitting this work, I and a lot of others would have been a whole lot harder on you. You have a lot of time to grow as a writer and to fix up on somethings. I also like that you chose the name Genevieve, I plan on naming my second daughter that one day (my first daughter's name will be Tuesday).



"I love you as certain dark things are to be loved, in secret, between the shadow and the soul."
— Pablo Neruda