Lost

She is lost in the shadows,
They swallow her whole,
Pulling her deeper.
She reaches out for you, but you're no longer there.

Hidden by the darkness,
Kept from the light.
She is lost, come and find her.
Save her from a private hell.

Trapped within her broken dreams,
Blind and bound, she screams your name.
But there is only quiet.
Her cries lost in a seemingly black hole.

In her hollowed heart, it's dark as a moonless night.
She reaches out, pulling back empty arms.
A small sob escapes her lips.
She has lost you.

I think the perspective of this one is interesting. Rather than the speaker being the one calling for help or running to the rescue, the speaker seems to be a third party, a mediator between the one who needs rescue and the one who ought to be doing the rescuing. In a sense that sort of distances the reader from the one who needs help-- it's not as convicting as it might be if the one in need was speaking directly to her potential rescuer. This isn't necessarily a good or bad thing; it's just something to be aware of when you are considering what reaction you're trying to get from your reader.

Also keep in mind everyone is going to have a very different reaction to a poem like this, one that directly addresses the reader. For me personally, I'm a bit put off by it just because I'm just not thrilled by the idea of someone needing me to pull themselves out of whatever mental darkness they've fallen into. For someone more sympathetic by nature, they may feel feel quite differently, and someone who feels like that are "lost" themselves will have a different reaction as well. Just keep in mind that when addressing the reader directly, as opposed to another character or no one in particular, you are inviting the reader and all their thoughts, opinions, and biases into your world, and you have no control over what happens next.

Overall, I think you do a decent job of conveying the emotion and desperation of the one in need. I'm not particularly good at dissecting actual wording and such though; hopefully someone with more talent in that area can review that. I do hope you keep working on it!

Hey there!

I have to go soon, so I'll be quite brief.

I like the concept of this poem. There's a lot of dark imagery.

However, you repeated the word 'lost' in every stanza. Try not to use repetitions, as it can grow worn-out and rather annoy than please the reader.

Also, other than that, we get it from the first stanza that this girl is lost and had been abandoned by someone. However, this is then repeated in the next stanzas. Try elaborating more on the idea. How does her emotions affect the people around her? How does she continue life without the person?

And one error: there's a typo in the third stanza, the last line. It's "seemingly." In addition, where's the punctuation in the first stanza? (The first three lines)

Overall, not bad! It has potential, just needs some improvement.
Keep writing!