The eyes in the mirror stare back at her,
The nose in the mirror is similar
To yours.
She touches her face
You shiver,
You see her face slowly wither.
And then;
Nothing is in the mirror.
Bite marks down your neck
Lipstick smeared
Lines down your face,
Chalk white as...

That's what you are,
A pile on the floor
...Dust.

I like that. It makes me feel like the person is numb, watching their life fly by.

Maybe you should call it 'Time'?

This line:

Chalk white as...

Confused me. Chalk white as what? It trails off a bit, and you lose energy.

The nose in the mirror is similar to yours.
I had a problem with this line. The wording is just a little bit awkward.

This poem was pretty good. At first, I expected a cliche poem about the mirror person being 'you,' etc. But the ending... the ending was really great. I loved the last four lines especially. Very powerful [and original, at that]. Nice poem.

Jennafina -

chalk white as...... dust.....

....see


emotion less....I kind of know what you mean...it was a difficult line to word...hmmm...thankies.

Mirrors are wonderful things to write about. 100/100 on subject!!! Yay!!!

Just a couple of grammatical things:
instead of a comma at the end of the first line, it should be a semi-colon. There should be a period at the end of the third line. The comma in the fourth line should also be a semi-colon. The line six semi-colon should either be a comma or a "..."
I'm sorry. A friend of mine gave me "grammar in poetry" thing and I've since been trying to use it.
I agree with emotion less on the line

The nose in the mirror is similar to yours.

, but I completely understand why it was hard. You did well and it really is a beautiful poem. A little editing is all it needs... hence the "little". Good work.

Tehe... *is too giggly right now tyo say anything useful*... Your title used to be my blog name. The *s and everything...