Good Wishes to Sheer Disaster

"You're making a mistake" I said.
" I think you should wait" I said.
But you didn't listen
I know what this thing can bring
disaster
But you refused to think that I knew something
Things will change
you will never be the same
"I love her" you said
This is true but loving and LOVING are total oppisites
"I know", I said "It's a problem and you'll never solve it"
But you won't listen
you never do
So when your relationship falls a part
and I have to chose between you two
I won't
I'll give you my good wishes and guard my kidneys as you rush into this faster
but I won't take a beating
when this ends in disaster

"You're making a mistake" I said.
" I think you should wait" I said.
But you didn't listen
I know what this thing can bring
disaster
But you refused to think that I knew something
Things will change
you will never be the same
"I love her" you said
This is true but loving and LOVING are total oppisites
"I know", I said "It's a problem and you'll never solve it"
But you won't listen
you never do
So when your relationship falls a part
and I have to chose between you two
I won't
I'll give you my good wishes and guard my kidneys as you rush into this faster
but I won't take a beating
when this ends in disaster

This needs sorting.

"You're making a mistake," I said,
"I think you should wait," I said.
But you didn't listen.
I know what this thing can bring:
disaster.
But you refused to think that I knew something.
Things will change,
you will never be the same.
"I love her," you said,
this is true but loving and LOVING are total opposites,
"I know," I said "It's a problem and you'll never solve it."
But you won't listen,
you never do.
So when your relationship falls a part
and I have to chose between you two,
I won't.
I'll give you my good wishes and guard my kidneys as you rush into this faster
but I won't take a beating
when this ends in disaster.

I added some punctuation in and corrected some spelling mistakes. There are too many pointless fragments lying around in this poem as is obvious if you now read my version. Delete all the things that don't help the poem to progress in any way and you will come out with a much slicker, meaningful poem. Also, you need to divide your different ideas into stanzas to make it more eye-friendly and easy-to-read. Especially the last six lines, which definitely need a stanza of their own, away from the rest. This will help them be more dramatic and give a greater impact on the reader.

Overall, I think you have something here. It definitely needs to be sorted out and tweaked a lot, though. There are so many things I could pick up on - it's childish to have to capitalise LOVING to distinguish it from your other "loving". If you want to be a poet you should be able to tell the reader the difference without resorting to this. Or the rhyme at the end which is as pointless as it is forced ("as you rish into this faster" is incomplete and in the context doesn't make sense). I will let you find the others yourself. Sort this out, trim it up, edit it again, and re-post it.

"a part" should be "apart". And take Firestarter's advice. His punctuation and grammar makes your poem flow better and pause in the correct places. It's a nice idea and I really enjoy the thoughts behind this, but there are some places where the rhythm is off (the first two lines, for example; try and avoid having "said" two stanzas in a row). Count your syllabuls and stick to a "syllabul-scheme", if you know what I mean. ABCD, ABCD, etc... not ABCA, ADCB, BACC, etc. Remain consistent and it will sound better.