Moment

does the title sound good? err... please review or critique and comment or like! It means a lot! I will send you a gift! No doubt!
~SkyyOn piano..Gm E(flat) B(flat) F
He is always on my mind
Can never just close my eyes
Without drifting away
I wonder if he's ever felt this way

Just a moment, but It's all the time
I've got to spill the reasons why
He is always on my heart
Am I for you? Could I be yours?

Your regard for me,
Everything is seen.
It's all the simple things,

The way we feel,
A love so real,
Or a dream so surreal?

Take a picture, capture the lines,
The smiles so child-like, it caught eyes.
I keep hoping but courage- come save time!
Hear the song stir up when we realize,

Your regard for me,
Everything is seen.
It's all the simple things,

The way we feel,
A Love so real,
Or a dream so surreal?

Very elegant. I loved it entirely. Best part was that not only was it full of emotion and flowed, which is all that lyrics actually require, but it was also legitimately good writing.

The way we feel,
A love so real,
Or a dream so surreal?

Quite beautiful.

I hope you set this to music. And record it. And put it on Youtube.

Hi there
Well, alright before I get to the song, the title is a problem ; for me at least.
It does not do the wonderful lyrics underneath any justice. I was expecting to here about a moment or that moment but there are different moments in the lyrics. How about...'on my mind'? OK maybe that's tacky also.

Any-who, I thought the lyrics were lovely. They exemplify the exact situation most of us go through, wonder...about boys and what they are thinking; which never gets old.

He is always on my mind
Can never just close my eyes
Without drifting away
I wonder if he's ever felt this way

That's the part I am referring too. Generally I like the lyrics so good job hey.

Hello, I'm Hydey.
I wish I could have heard what this song sounds like. Also, I agree with the others, you need a different title. To me, choosing the right title for a finished writing project is the most difficult part. It seems as if your song deserves or requires more than just "Moment". But it will come to you. I adored this and I could imagine a singer really getting into the feeling of this song. I want to see more from you, so keep writing!

Hello there!

I totally like this! It wasn't expressive to the point that you are really crazy for one person but it really tells how much you cared for him. I like how you placed a rhyme into it so it really helps the lyric to flow better.

The way we feel,
A love so real,
Or a dream so surreal?

I love this line. It rhymes well but most of all, I could feel the differentiating of love if it's for real or just like a fantasy... something like that.

Keep writing!

Peace out!