SHM Part 1: the begining chapter 1 sec. 1: Laney

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I stood over the man, my feet washed in his blood, trying to understand how I just seem to have appeared out of thin air. Yet, I knew it was because of this man, who i just saw kill himself. Because of me.I pushed the thought out of my head as soon as I heard it.

I was so confused, yet I had an extreme knowledge, seeing I was just born- I knew how to read, breath, talk and walk; I knew I was 14 years of age; I knew my favorites and least favorites of everything from colors to foods. Yet, I didn't know my name or where the first 14 years of my life happened, or if I had ever lived them, for that matter.

I smashed my writs against the table with empty test tubes and tools that I believe I came from, out of frustration and anger. Then under my face, as a blurry, white sheet blinding my sight, I saw a paper. As I pulled away, it was legible and i could read it I was like and across-stick poem:

Long lasting
Attainable
N
E
Y
The N, E, and Y were washed out by the blood of the man. But I then knew my name.

Laney: a form of Lane, meaning narrow road. I suddenly knew this fact, as a feeling of a wind through my body. The wind of knowledge i learned to call it.

Suddenly, the table next to mine started to bubble and shake. I suddenly knew I wasn't the only one.
Last edited by callmeLily73 on Sat May 15, 2010 4:57 pm, edited 1 time in total.
Be yourself
And no one else
dance to the beat
and loose control
Never forget who you are
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Wow, I love it but it was too short. You didn't have any mistakes :wink: I love the ending it leaves you wondering who else is there like her:) Keep writing:) I'll be looking out for the next chapter, could you PM me when you post it?

Thanks, the first chapter is as mysterious as the prologue and it makes me want to read more, I can't wait for more :wink:

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"Even in the darkness, my heart will you..."
"How do you escape from yourself?"
"...open your eyes, and see..."

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Very intriguing start. At first, when her feet are washed in blood, I thought she had killed someone herself. But reading on, it becomes so much more interesting than that! I want to know about her creation and why the man killed himself. And the end of the chapter left me wanting more. Good job of throwing us right in the action then leaving us in suspense1 :smt003
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