What's... ?

What's a flower without a petal
What's a storm without rain
What's Hansel without Gretel
What's sorrow without pain?

What's a shoe without laces
What's a bee without a sting
What's a nerd without braces
What's marriage without a ring?

What's a book without pages
What's a beach without sand
What's a zoo without cages
What's a finger without a hand?

What's Minnie without Mickey
What's Tigger without Pooh
What's Patrick without Spongebob
What's Me without You?



Yeah, its kinda lame, but I was bored during maths class

Hi Darth! I seem to be bumping into you a lot...Are you following me? xD

So! Your poem. I actually really liked it! Sometimes you'll find that rhyming poems are completely forced and corny, but you pulled it off with this one! Great job.

The only thing I didn't like about it, actually, was the repetition of "what's." After a while my eyes couldn't discern one from the other, and it looked like some crazy jumble of words that were spinning in my head. o.O Well, not really, but it was kind of weird.

My favorite part:

What's a book without pages
What's a beach without sand
What's a zoo without cages
What's a finger without a hand?

Books! And the beach! And...caged animals? *sad* Aww...

Well, keep up the good work, anyways, and congratulations on getting your work featured on the front page!

-Knightley

Wow, just wow. I really liked this poem, but like Mr. Knightly, I think it was kind of hard to read because of the "what"'s.

Keep on writing,
Aristotle. (also known as Ari of the Stotle)

Hey guys

I definitely agree with you, Knightley, it does look pretty jumbled... Its actually starting to confuse me now!
But thanks a lot for the feedback It really helps!

Nice, lol.
Very interesting! :]
Keep it up!!!