Trapped

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In my field of imaginary flowers,
I lay inside myself for hours,
watching black tainted raindrops fall
onto my cold dry face as I call
for my soul to return back,
So that I can escape from this bitter black.
I am so tired of lingering in the doorway,
while with me my memories will not stay.
As the wind whispers through the trees,
emptiness fogs out the pleas
of silver lined clouds
wrapped in paper shrouds,
Once again longing to be free.
But now I can see
that neither they nor I will be.
You've never had to crawl, you've never had to see,
what it feels like to be so trapped underneath

the weight of someone's world, comes crashing down on me

I was longing to be free, I put the bullet in you and me

This is my farewell to you and I,
this will all end in tragedy




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It a interesting poem, but I'm not too sure about the meaning. Is the person dreaming of something different to happen? Or is he/she dreaming of getting a way from something he/she does not like? To me, it has different stories all rolled into one, but you did very well on it! The rhyming was beautiful and the words you chose give it dark yet dream-like feel. Nice work!
It is Hope that makes a Dream and Love that completes it.




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Thanks, I was going for a dark dream-like feel. It is mostly describing how I feel, how I just want to wake up from my life.
You've never had to crawl, you've never had to see,
what it feels like to be so trapped underneath

the weight of someone's world, comes crashing down on me

I was longing to be free, I put the bullet in you and me

This is my farewell to you and I,
this will all end in tragedy



Why should Caesar just get to stomp around like a giant while the rest of us try not to get smushed under his big feet? Brutus is just as cute as Caesar, right? Brutus is just as smart as Caesar, people totally like Brutus just as much as they like Caesar, and when did it become okay for one person to be the boss of everybody because that's not what Rome is about! We should totally just stab Caesar!
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