Oliver - Prologue

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This is an idea I'm playing with. Not really sure where it's going to go just yet. I have the general plot worked out in my head, but God only knows if I'll ever get around to acting on it. This prologue is the main character after the story has taken place, so it's not really meant to make much sense until later on. It just sets the tone I'm going for. Anyway, tell me what you think :)

Prologue

I am not a good person. If you really knew me, you would see that. But you never knew me, not really. You were too busy being charming to conquer that mountain. Congrats, dear, I opened my heart up for the first time. But hey, at least you know now that I'm not that easily broken.

I am a user. I use and abuse until there’s nothing left. You didn’t know that, did you? Nobody knows until I’m done. But you used me too, darling, and you were worse. You had no guilt, no conscience. Who do you think you are anyway? Do you think you’re infallible, or perfect? You’re not. You’re an ugly, broken shell of a man.

I am a trickster. I manipulate my way in, and fake my way out. Don’t get me wrong; I adore it. But what you do is so much worse. You’re sick about it, honey.

I am an enigma. The real me, that is. I can’t even figure myself out. You? You’re simple. You walk the walk; you talk the talk; you play the game like a regular pro. But there’s nothing underneath that handsome face of yours, sweetheart, nothing but greed. You love yourself enough for the both of us. So what do you do this for?

I am not a good person, but at least I’m not you.
We're young, open flowers in the windy fields of this war-torn world - Mumford & Sons




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Xirenia wrote:I am not a good person, but at least I’m not you.

haha i love this line. the whole thing was pretty good but you could spice it up a bit with some metaphors or similes to make it interest the reader more. can't wait to see where you are going with this
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The simple truth is that authors like making people squirm. If this weren't the case, all novels would be filled completely with cute bunnies having birthday parties.
— Brandon Sanderson, Alcatraz Versus the Evil Librarians