Northern Lights (Haiku)

4 posts
User avatar
backgroundbob
Supporter
Gender Male
Points 1726
Reviews 266
Fri Dec 02, 2005 2:13 am
backgroundbob says... · Fri Dec 02, 2005 2:13 am
For those of you who don't know what a Haiku is, it's a form of Japanese poetry that has to be 5,7,5 syllables long in each of three lines respectively.


Northern Lights

Freeze my tongue, O night,
'till her razor'd burst of style:
transcendence, yet ice.
The Oneday Cafe
though we do not speak, we are by no means silent.
Quote




User avatar
PsyLynx
Gender Male
Points 890
Reviews 205




User avatar
yoha_ahoy
Gender Female
Points 1254
Reviews 387
Sun Dec 04, 2005 9:37 pm
yoha_ahoy says... · Sun Dec 04, 2005 9:37 pm
Cool... I like it. There's not much to comment about on a three line poem but it's good. :D
@(^_^)@
Got YWS?
Quote




User avatar
Muse
Gender Female
Points 890
Reviews 176
Sun Dec 04, 2005 9:59 pm
Muse says... · Sun Dec 04, 2005 9:59 pm
I really like haiku's...especially if they are pretty like this one. Well thought out as well, some haiku's you find are just jammed together so it fits..but it doesn't necessarily sound good. They can be tricky too, so i think you've done a real good job. I like the style of words used too..classic almost. Good one!
"Sometimes we see a cloud that's dragonish,
A vapour sometimes like a bear or lion,
A towered citadel, a pendant rock,
A forked mountain, or blue promontory,
With trees upon't that nod unto the world,And mock our eyes with air.."
Quote

4 posts


No man or woman who tries to pursue an ideal in his or her own way is without enemies.
— Daisy Bates