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Ieatworms
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Mon Nov 28, 2005 9:55 pm
Ieatworms says... · Mon Nov 28, 2005 9:55 pm
This was one of your more accessible poems. I liked it.

One point of concern:

"Her taste lingers like languid language leaves the reader speechless."

I think a word or comma is missing here.
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PsyLynx
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Thu Dec 01, 2005 3:38 am
PsyLynx says... · Thu Dec 01, 2005 3:38 am
I really like it a lot. Good job.
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