Infected

Prologue
In 2015, a cure for the common cold was found. Yes, it worked on humans, but when they tested it on a dog to see if it worked on animals, something went horribly wrong. The dog they had tested on had already had some sort of virus in it, when the cure and the virus combined it created a disease that soon infected and killed most of the humans on earth. When the disease reached the animals in the abandoned houses, zoos and forest’s it turned them into flesh eating monsters that fed on the remaining survivors. My name is Halia Drawbridge and I am the last survivor of the disease that killed the earth.

Hello, I am AspiringAuthorA..M. and shall be your reviewer tonight. Hm, that is a curiously short piece.

Prologue

In 2015 a cure for the common cold was found. Yes, it worked on humans, but when they tested it on a dog to see if it worked on animals, something went horribly wrong. The dog they had tested on had already had some sort of virus in it, when the cure and the virus combined it created a disease that soon infected and killed most of the humans on Earth. When the disease reached the animals in the abandoned houses, zoos, and forest’s it turned them into flesh eating monsters that fed on the remaining survivors.

My name is Halia Drawbridge and I am the last survivor of the disease that killed the Earth.

Earth is a proper noun, so it's supposed to be capitalized. I did that for you in red. I also added a comma. In addition, I brought down the last sentence where the protagonist is introduced down a line. Since the first few sentences were mostly telling I thought it would be best to separate the first person point of view from it.

I imagine this is a prologue for something much bigger. I am crazy about super viruses and other world destroying things. So I hope to see a bigger work of your up soon. Happy writing.

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I could find only one error that would be in the beginning. You need to put a comma after in 2015,

Other than that I can not find anything else and it sounds pretty interesting

Is this a copy off of the movie I am Legend? Cause it sounds suspiciously similar...... Other than that its not too shabby.

sasquash wrote:Is this a copy off of the movie I am Legend? Cause it sounds suspiciously similar...... Other than that its not too shabby.

Everyone is saying that!!
Its not, In I am Legend the humans go all freakishly weird not the animals and the virus doesn't come off a dog, the scientist was just a thick headed dude, and if you would just let me finish writing the second part you would see that its completely different!

Thanks anyway
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This sounds cool...write more!! Lol I thought this was Olli's...cuz he showed it to me first haha. Sorry this wasn't a very good review. There wasn't much to talk about, considering it was so short...lol.

Hi it's cool.

The dog they had tested on had already had some sort of virus in it, when the cure and the virus combined, it created a disease that soon infected and killed most of the humans on earth.

But why do everyone's after," the last man/woman on earth" ? Work on this more. It would turn out to be great.

Nice twist on a classic zombie story! So it's not humans that get infected, it's the animals this time, huh? I'd like to see how this shapes up, obviously it's too soon to say if we have a great story on our hands, but so far so good! Please PM me when chapter one goes up, I'd love to review it! But capital Earth, that drove me insane

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And if you have time, it'd be awesome if you could check out my zmobie story, first chapter is here