Lies

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I've been playing around with this for awhile...I dunno if it's any good or not. Please review! :D
Lies

I hear about
people and their doings.
I think about it,
for a long, long time,
and,
some how,
when I tell my friends,
the facts are twisted,
ever so slightly,
the story is changed.

Next I hear,
it's changed so much,
unrecognizable.
And finally,
finally,
it comes full circle,
to the person it was told about.
They hear it,
are shocked,
but I can't take back
those words
that started it all.

I kind of like it, but... :?
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I like it, it has a truth to it. The rhythm seems a bit broken, but I think you were going for it. When I read it aloud it has an interesting flow to it. Very nice, I'm a bit tired so I'm afraid I can't really offer a review.
Sorry, but I do like it!
~Shaard
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He he, to much "it" 's. I liked it though. It's very interesting. I see behind the words. It's talking about how people gossip and it comes back around to bring back guilt...and I see how this poem goes... :wink: The title works along just a tidbit. This is good, keep it! :)
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I like this. It has a sense of truth to it and was well done. But I don't think it really did rhyme. However, the thought was there and I think that's what made it great.



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