I really loved it, but my question remains on the first sentence "Water ... flame..." I mean, I can relate the sun with red color so it bleed. Then, the silver is also related to the moon on some way. How about the water? You want to tell that the water turn into it parallel version, right?. I really love haikus, but I did not have write one yet.
I love Haiku's but I can never write them. You clearly can. I loved every single word. The vision was fantastic. In Haiku's you have to use every word to its full potential. I think you have achieved this. But I'm curious to know what inspired you to write this? Anyways please pm me if you need help with anything. Well done!!
Oh, I guessed right about the sun "over the ocean"! I think Monet did a picture that brings this exact image to mind. As for the final line, a word other than "silver" would be nice, only because moonlight is so commonly associated with that particular word for the color.
Overall, decent.
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–antimelrose
Sabbatical isn't the right word, but it almost is. loves like a hurricane/i am a tree/bending the weight of his wind and mercy/dcb grace finds beauty in everything... makes beauty out of ugly things/U2