No Greater Love
There's only one creator,
only one great love,
there's no one greater,
or so high above,
our hearts are meant only for him,
he's beyond anything we can think,
he only fills us to the rim,
even if we only need a wink,
from east he loves us to the west,
no matter what you have done,
he thinks you're the very best,
all he wants is your heart to be won,
it doesn't matter you or your gender,
there's no one above,
all you have to do is surrender,
there's no greater love
There was only one thing wrong that I could put my finger on: commas! Too many! I used to do this too, but really, they're unneeded and disturb the flow of your piece. Oh, one more thing. The line that says "it doesn't matter you or your gender." Hmm. I wasn't satisfied with that line. However, if you try to do anything else the rhyming will be messed up. So, I suggest you to keep it at that. PM me if you ever need anything,