Endure

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The world besets me with innumerable challenges and obstacles

Of pain...physical and emotional
Of stress...conditional and mental
Of confliction...primal and moral

The cosmos and the actuality of life all contend against me
Of reality...uncertain and assured
Of truth...falsified and validated
Of time...cessation and manifestation

All that which is the realm in which existence befalls me is mine
Mine and mine alone to fall under
Hardship
Misfortune
Suffering

But I will forever endure...wearing the most wonderful of expressions to be carried

A smile
Ridentem dicere verum quid vetat
"What prevents me from speaking the truth with a smile?"
-Horace(Satires)

“Stop talking about what the good person should be, and just be that person.”
-Marcus Aurelius




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This poem is the best poem I have ever read. It is very in its build, as well as in its descriptions. This poem is not something that can improve in any way, in my opinion, at least. Your descriptions are exceptionally wonderful, using unconnected words to portray a wholesome picture of an underdog, and it ended on a positive note.
If you ever post something here again, please PM me so that I'll know.
Sincerely, ab5986.
Will Turner: You didn't beat me: you ignored the rules of engagement. In a fair fight, I'd kill you.
Jack Sparrow: That's not much incentive for me to fight fair, then, is it?




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Well, you've already gotten your ego stroking from ab5986, "the best poem I have ever read", that's a big call.
I didn't see this as a poem so much as like an inspirational poem hung in a gym somewhere or a councilor's office. The entire thing is repetition, did you use a form to write this thing, or what? There's no imagery, no specifics, no insight, it's just generalized, cliched sentiment. I mean, it would sell big on a mug or a teatowel or something, but to call this poetry is to disrespect several millenia of poets who actually, you know, read things, and worked to better the written word. Write better.
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