Halloween

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It was a dark Halloween
And the moon shined bright
With just a twist or a turn
A child could tremble with fright

Everything that went bump in the night
And everything that crackled
And all of the creatures
That laughed with a cackle

There was one little child
Afraid and alone
He walked up to each house and rang each doorbell
When the person opened the door, he gave a small moan

He did not wish to look in their eyes
He knew their fate
And he didn't know why
He knew that they all would eventually be bait

Not literally, no
But figuratively, yes
They would be the bait of a plan from long ago
And it would become a great, big mess

He is the only one who knows
And it has caused him to become friendless
Because of all the times he tried to tell them, The Unknowing
They say that he's a crazy little boy, but that's anyone's guess

So every Halloween
He says to the men and women that come to the doors,
"You have been WARNED!"




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Hey, WalkInTheSun! I'm not the best at reviewing poetry, but I'll try. :)

I like this poem!! I like the idea for the story/poem. This is something I caught, though:

Everything that went bump in the night
And everything that crackled
And all of the creatures
That laughed with a cackle

Crackled and cackle don't rhyme, and every other line of the other stanzas do. They sound similar, but they don't rhyme.

So every Halloween
He says to the men and women that come to the doors,
"You have been WARNED!"

Same for this (Halloween and warned don't rhyme), though since this stanza is only three lines long it might not matter. Like I said, I'm not a great poet, so if I'm wrong please ignore this. Oh, and I personally don't like all capital words, so I would just bold, italicize, or underline warned. That's just a personal opinion, though.

Great work! :D I wish I could write poetry like this....
~~Lee-Anna
Please forgive me if I over-edit anything of yours.




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Hello! I was strolling the poetry section when I found this piece! (Halloween is my favorite holiday :mrgreen: ) Well, let's see what I can find...

And the moon shined bright

I'm pretty sure it's sone

And everything that crackled
And all of the creatures
That laughed with a cackle

Crackle? Cackle? Hmm... doesn't work I'm afraid

Well I hope this helped!
winie*
Sometimes you're the apple, sometimes you're the mouth- me XD



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