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have you ever sat out on a balcony or in a tree and gazed out at the beauty of the world and wondered, why is the world the way it is well if you have your the perfect person, you see things the way i do and ii always look at the bigger picture. i think out side the box and imagine what a world would be like if this or that happened!it pushes me to be a writer and although i am who I am and act the way i do i stile am a creative thinker. i imagine foam erupting at the edge of a surf tormented shore and see a hand in my dream, holding tiny crystals of golden sand wishing, hoping i could just keep one, save one from being taken away by the blue ocean sea. each one has its own personality and this is how i look at life, not just as a planet in space but a beach in a whole galaxy of planets that each have their own outlook on life and the world today.!
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Hey chaos, I'll be your reviewer for today!
have you ever sat out on a balcony or in a tree and gazed out at the beauty of the world and wondered, why is the world the way it is well if you have your the perfect person, you see things the way i do and ii always look at the bigger picture. i think out side the box and imagine what a world would be like if this or that happened!it pushes me to be a writer and although i am who I am and act the way i do i stile am a creative thinker. i imagine foam erupting at the edge of a surf tormented shore and see a hand in my dream, holding tiny crystals of golden sand wishing, hoping i could just keep one, save one from being taken away by the blue ocean sea. each one has its own personality and this is how i look at life, not just as a planet in space but a beach in a whole galaxy of planets that each have their own outlook on life and the world today.!


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Have you ever sat out on a balcony or in a tree and gazed out at the beauty of the world, wondering why the world is the way it is? Well, if you have your perfect person, you see things the way I do and I always look at the bigger picture. I think outside the box and imagine what a world would be like if this or that happened! It pushes me to be a writer and although I am who I am and act the way I do I still am a creative think. I imagine foam erupting at the edge of a surf tormented shore and see a hand in my dream, holding tiny crystals of golden sand, wishing, hoping, I could keep one, save one from being taken away by the blue ocean sea. Each one has its own personality and this is how I look at life. Not just as a planet floating in space, but a beach in a whole galaxy of planets, each having their own outlook on and life and the world today.

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I loved these lines:

I imagine foam erupting at the edge of a surf tormented shore and see a hand in my dream, holding tiny crystals of golden sand, wishing, hoping, I could keep one, save one from being taken away by the blue ocean sea.
It totally painted a picture in my mind, and it really almost made me cry, because you put emotion in it.

Each one has its own personality and this is how I look at life.
Also this line, it made me think of all the people I know, and how we are all different, like that grain of sand.

This really has potential! Great job chaos!

~Forest
Sorrow lasts through this night
I'll take this piece of you,
and hold for all eternity
For just one second I felt whole... as you flew right through me.


~Sorrow by Flyleaf



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