For one to know is not always for one to find out.The never ending secret and the never ending lies for he is to scared to cover it up.sweaty palms and heavy breathing is what stands out in the midnight silence.Rays of moonlight streaming on his face as the moaning of a teenage girl silently cries in the desolated ally behind the old pizza shop (which is now abandoned for no person around has any money).The night goes on with nothing but groans and the tears of the innocent.the scares are made and the life of one is ruined because her tests come up positive and it instantly limits her ever so short life. The childhood is over and the next couple years she will have to make up for the rest of the life she could have had. A.I.D.S.....
this is quite good, but there are some serious grammar issues, and it gives me a headache to read! Could you possibly put in some spaces? I liked the idea of this
From the shadows a fire shall be woken
A light from the shadows shall spring
Renewed shall be blade that was broken
The crownless again shall be king
J.R.R Tolkein
For one to know is not always for one to find out.
The never ending secret
The never ending lies
He is to scared to cover it up.
Sweaty palms and heavy breathing
Stands out in the midnight silence.
Rays of moonlight streaming on his face
As the moaning of a teenage girl silently cries
In the desolated ally behind the old pizza shop
[Now abandoned for nobody has money]
The night goes on with nothing but groaning
And the tears of the innocent.
The scars are made and the life of one is ruined.
Her tests come up positive
It instantly limits her ever so short life.
The childhood is over
The next couple years she will have to make up for
The rest of the life she could have had.
A.I.D.S.....
If you just put them in stanzas and lines it would be more readble... I had to do it, it annoyed me in your paragraph form.
Nice job... scary to think about though but nice... (Was the guy somebody she knew?)
