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New Humanity

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*First time writing a storybook, but I thought I'd give it a shot.*

STORY

2100AD was the day Deva (God, but with a different name) started the apocolypse of Earth, in revenge for the nightmare humanity became. No life would be sustainable, disease was everywhere, plants wilted, air grew toxic, nothing would live. The exact begining of this, though, an unsuspecting savior came; the devil, who named herself Harlot (again, just wanted to use a different name).

Harlot couldn't save Earth, but instead, she gave humanity a new chance. Every living soul was transferred to a new world she made in Hell named "The New Underworld".

Gigantic floating countries of each terrain, including one of city, desert, snow, and many, many more. Each human soul was given a new body to live in, and a new life. Their past was gone, but their souls were saved and put into new bodies, named New Humans, and put into the society of the New Underworld. They had no memory of Earth, but only of New Underworld, but nobody wondered. New Humanity was happy, living a life not too different from how it was on Earth.

Harlot wasn't in it just for being some hero, though. Once a New Human dies, their soul becomes a soldier in Harlot's super powered army, without a memory of their past. They become slaves to Harlot, doing as she says each day. If they died in battle, they'd reincarnate as another new human, and every soul would be in Harlot's cycle.

Deva has her own super powered army too, made up of righteous souls she saved from the apocolypse who wished to fight, but it is smaller. Many times, war has broken loose in The New Underworld, but not once has the situation changed.

Until now.

Deva had a plan. 10 souls would retrieve all of their memories, and realize the incorrectness of the situation. They would join Deva as the most powerful, passionate and experienced soldiers in the army, and whatever New Human body they had when convinced would be the last one they get (They will be super powered soldiers of Heaven and Hell, so dying is designed to be difficult, but not impossible).

Deva immediately got to work, and within luck, she found 10 of the oldest souls and gave back every memory their souls had ever had.

It almost worked. Half of them went to join Deva, but Harlot managed to reach the other half of them and convinced them to join her army.

The wars still continue between the large armies, but mostly fought by Deva's 5 and Harlot's 5, and neither side will rest until the other is defeated.

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MY RULES

YWS Rules, of course.

Nobody can be killed by your own without the other writer's consent.

Relationships are fine but no sex scenes (or at least, no detail for them. Say that the character's had sex, but say it poetically in a single sentence. I'd ban them all together, but it's still Hell this takes place in, where one of the main reasons people were sent was for it.).

Try and stay away from insane gore.

Lastly, any profanity is fine, but don't use it in every sentence. It's like putting the word "banana" into every sentence; not bad, but annoying as hell.

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CHARACTER FORMAT

Name:

Team (Devas or Harlots):

Appearance (Pictures are fine):

Personality:

Power (Not manditory, but recommended):

Favorite Weapon (Again, not manditory, but recommended):

Other:

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LASTLY

Considering any character could have lived and died 5-5000 times since the New Underworld was created, I figured age and a history was irrelivant.

I'm hoping people join, but I of course can't be too certain on how this will go over. I hope for the best, please join, and in a different post following this one, I plan to make one Harlot and one Deva.

Also, I'll control Harlot, and perhaps Deva. If someone else wants to be Deva, go ahead and ask. I'd rather control only one of them, but if nobody wants too, I take that control.

I hope some of you guys join! Seeya!
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Name: Tommy

Team: Harlots

Appearance:
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Personality: Doesn't like to be bored, fearless, very energetic, and atheletic. He doesn't ever want to be sneaky, or whisper. If he wants something, he'll destroy anything in his path, and laugh while doing it. He also loves being the leader.

Power: Ice manipulation

Favorite Weapon: Grenade Launcher

Other: Nothing
"I'm fearless in my heart
They will always see that in my eyes
I am the passion, I am the warfare
I will never stop
Always constant,
Accurate,
Intense"
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Name: Renaheid



Team (Devas or Harlots): Devas



Appearance (Pictures are fine): She has rich, flaming red hair and smoky grayish-green eyes. She is of average build, of light weight and is somewhat tall.



Personality: Sometimes hot-headed, Rena is rather opinionated and critical at times. She is, however, good-hearted, and often jumps in to save others at the risk of her own life. Rena doesn't like the spotlight, even though she often finds herself in it. She has fast reflexes, and can be relied upon to be the first person to land a hit. However, she is physically not-so-strong, and is pathetic when it comes to punching or kicking.



Power: Pyrokinesis, the ability to control fire.



Favorite Weapon: Magical Crossbow - all arrows shot find their way to the target, unless the target somehow manages to evade it.



Other: Up for love. :P
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name- Syn
team- Devas

appearance- http://media.photobucket.com/image/blac ... -1.jpg?o=3

personality- Jaded, cynical, and self absorbed. Syn seems like a strange choice to fight on the side of the heavens.

power- 2 ablities, the ability to summon and manipulate the wind and air. Also Syn possesses the ability to Soul Jump, the power to invade and take over anothers mind. This is an ability he keeps secret and rarely uses.

favorite weapon- A long sword
other- Up for love.
DANCE- Like no-one is watching
LOVE- Like you've never been hurt
SING- Like no-one is listening
LIVE- Like it's heaven on earth.

Please read and review my novel. The title is Fireborn. Here's the link.

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(Let me know if there's anything I need to change.)

Name: Amy Little

Team (Devas or Harlots): Devas

Appearance (Pictures are fine): http://l.yimg.com/img.omg.yahoo.com/omg ... 725210.jpg


Personality: Usually she's quiet and "to herself." She doesn't really talk alot, but does enjoy the company of others. She is not shy, she just doesn't prefer to talk. All of her life she's been the observant type, not really standing out. When she does speak, it's usually a verse from the bible, the original one that most people don't even know about.


Power: Can cut through anything with a single wave of her hand.


Favorite Weapon: One long knife, with a one inch thick blade.


Other: Is trying to remember all of the verses from the original bible, and remember what it stood for. Up for love.
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CHARACTER FORMAT



Name: Jezebel Duquart



Team (Devas or Harlots): Harlot



Appearance (Pictures are fine): Extremely gorgeous. Past super-model gorgeous. She has long strawberry blonde hair with dark red highlights. Ice blue eyes. Very tall, very thin.



Personality: to be frank, her name means whore but she's not one. She is sacastic but sweet. Gets extremely frustrated when people stereotype her as a slut. She can at times though be slutty.



Power (Not manditory, but recommended): She can charm. She can force someone into a trance where they pretty much do whatever she wants them too, including kill themselves or others.



Favorite Weapon (Again, not manditory, but recommended): A foot long katana/samurai sword.



Other: Up for love but no one night stand things. She went to hell because she killed any of her boyfriends who broke up with her.
I am nothing
but a mouthful of 'sorry's, half-hearted
apologies that roll of my tongue, smoothquick, like 'r's
or maybe like pocket candy
that's just a bit too sweet.

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Is this another storybook that will die after a few days? :P

They never last do they? :(

I'll probably join anyway. There's plenty of spots, is there not? :D
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CHARACTER FORMAT



Name: Kemima though she is normally known by the name Raven.



Team (Devas or Harlots): Harlots



Appearance (Pictures are fine): Short black hair with dark blue highlights so it looks like a raven, dark tan skin, about 5'9", gray-blue-green eyes, slightly musicale.



Personality: She's vary pushy and not normally a vary good team player. She is vary sneaky though and can ambush just about anyone if she tries (or so she tells everyone.)



Power (Not mandatory, but recommended): Can kind of slow down time. I mean not really but it makes it seem that way. Like thous slow motion action scenes in movies. It makes for faster reflexes.



Favorite Weapon (Again, not mandatory, but recommended): A double edged 4 inch long knife with a handle made of hard oak.



Other: Up for love I guess.
“There are many thing people have claimed can not be true and yet nearly all of them have ether been true to begin with or been made true by thous stubborn enough to ignore them.”-Scientist 666 from my 2009 NaNoWriMo novel.




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Can I claim a Deva soldier spot, please? If need be I'll swap to Harlot. :D

Name: Carus Raptor

Team: Harlot

Appearance:
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You can usually find him wearing skinny jeans and a shirt with something dryly humorous on it.Image
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Personality: Carus is a horribly pessimistic person with a negative vibe hanging around him. That said, he isn't emo or unenergetic and sloth-like, he just has a very dark sense of humour and is rather sadistic and sarcastic. He seems bitter and is very cynical and maniacal sometimes. However, at times, he can surprise people with being empathetic. He has quite the vocabulary and intelligence, so beware if you want to get in a conversational fight. He has been described as "cruel". (The reason that Deva wasn't able to convince him over into her army was that because he was too much of a handful for her.)

Power: Ability to slow time / move through time quickly. (If you want to know the scientific thoery behind that, it is that Carus can actually only bend light, causing light to move slower because it is needs to follow the curve, but as the speed of light is constant this generates moments in which it looks as though time is slowing down around him, but truthfully he is only moving fast.)

Favorite Weapon: Daggers.

Other: Up for love
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Guys, I really want to write in this storybook, so why don't we start?
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Sorry to forget you guys if any of you were attached to this!

Truth is, I was trying to get an idea for a novel, and this was a first concept. Now, I've got the full concept, so I really don't have much of a use for this.

I had a bit of a rediculous storybook insanity rush when I posted this. I was a part of about 5 or 6, and I couldn't keep track. I'm now in one that's pretty constructed and solid, and I can't really handle another.

If I was attached to this enough, I wouldn't have forgotten it.

If someone else wants to take lead, go right ahead, but I'm afraid to say that I'm out.

Best of luck, everybody!
"I'm fearless in my heart
They will always see that in my eyes
I am the passion, I am the warfare
I will never stop
Always constant,
Accurate,
Intense"
"The Audience is Listening", by Steve Vai




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I thought you were dead.

Hm, I believe that's a movie quote. So, I can't claim it as my own. :P
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*Sadface*

Who's up for continuing this SB anyway? Please reply on the DT I created - post654910.html#p654910
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*Currently attempting to revive*

I believe the title is now valid. We need THREE more people.

Also, since I have no idea of the actual plot, I took the liberty of making one myself, and this will have to be the information page seeing as I can't actually edit the original:

Edited!
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There will a bit of change . . . nothing drastic however, I assure you. :D

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Change 1. The New Underworld is further along (technologically speaking) of course. With technology which is sort of remnant of the Matrix.

(Other changes/details may be altered.)

Also, I have changed a few bits in the storyline description. Read on, if you want to see the changes.

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2100AD was the day Deva started the apocalypse of Earth; in revenge for the nightmare had humanity become. No life was sustainable, disease was everywhere, plants wilted, air grew toxic, nothing could live. At the beginning of this "purge", though, an unsuspecting savior came; the devil, named Harlot.

Harlot couldn't save Earth, but instead, she gave humanity a new chance. Every living soul was transferred to a new world she made in Hell named "The New Underworld".

Gigantic floating countries of each terrain, including one of city, desert, snow, and many, many more. Each human soul was given a new body to live in, and a new life. Their past was gone, but their souls were saved and put into new bodies, named New Humans, and put into the society of the New Underworld. They had no memory of Earth, but only of New Underworld and the majority of the population never wondered why. New Humanity was happy, living a life not too different from how it once was on Earth.

Harlot wasn't in this just to be some hero, though. Once a New Human died, their soul became a soldier in Harlot's super powered army, without a single memory of their past. They become slaves to Harlot, doing as she says each day. If they died in battle, they'd reincarnate as another New Human, and every soul would be forever stuck in Harlot's cycle.

Deva, however, had her own super powered army, made up of righteous souls she saved from the apocalypse who wished to fight, but this battlement is much, much smaller. Many times, war has broken loose in The New Underworld, but not once has the situation changed.

Until now, plottings are underhand, the New Humans aren't as naive as they appear and evil and good must once again clash.

Deva hatched a plan. Ten souls would retrieve all of their memories, and realize the incorrectness of the situation. They would join Deva as the most powerful, passionate and experienced soldiers in the army, and whatever New Human body they had when they joined would be the last one they would ever get. Though the bodies would be enhanced with their powers, and thus making their deaths rather difficult, though not impossible.

Deva immediately got to work, and with tremendous luck, she found Ten of the oldest souls and gave back every memory their souls had ever had.

It almost worked. Almost. Half of them went to join Deva, but Harlot managed to coax the other half into joining her army.

The wars still continue between the large armies, but mostly fought by Deva's Half and Harlot's Half, and neither side will rest, they will not stop pushing until something gives.
If anymore new information comes up - watch this post. This will be where I will put such things.


TEAM LIST


Devas

1. Renaheid (LezaleanWitch)

2. Syn (Sylverdawn) - Unsure/no-reply

3. Amy (AmberAngst)

4.

5.


Harlots

1. Jezebel (jasminebells) - Unsure/no-reply

2. Carus (Light_Devil!)

3. Amelia (Kaywiia)

4. Stepenie (Gabriel aka AspiringAuthorA..M.)

5.



(We still need 3 people more to join. Right now, we don't have enough to start, so anyone is welcome to join!)
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Three Devas? Guess I'll be Harlot to even it out.

Hm, it will be interesting to be a girl character in a storybook, so...

Name: Stephanie Myer

Team: Harlot

Appearance: Like Stephanie Myer.

Personality: Obnoxious and self obsessed. Likes to think that stalking is romantic.

Power: Summoning spirit beasts

Favorite Weapon: Automatic shotgun

Other: She will go insane if anybody talks about her writing.
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