This is cute! I like this poem for the most part, but the third line, "Started with the garden plow" seems a little bit like it doesn't fit. I understand that this poem needs to rhyme, but maybe if you change it to something about a seed instead, it will be more in line with the "growing" sense of this poem.
Keep writing! Good job!
June
"I'd steal somebody's purse if I could google it and then download it." -- Firestarter
Shouldn't you say in the beginning "how small the watermelon seed is right now?" Because you don't plant a baby watermelon and it grown into a big watermelon.
I really like this. It's haiku-ish, but not, which makes it different.
I am a little confused by the end. Why is it alone? I don't get it. Also, was it alone its whole life, or was it surrounded by love in the beginning? I wonder... you leave me with so many questions.
Hi, there! This is cute. Made me think of watermelon, which I oh so very miss now that it's winter. Anyhoo... I like this, for the most part. I'm just not a fan of small poems, and this one just...the last line just kind of throws me off since its shorter than all the rest. I wouldn't notice as much if it were a long poem, but it just stands out because of how short this is. Nice, though. Tata! -Miss Mizz
"Chase your dreams, and remember me, speak bravery, Because after all, those wings will take you up so high." -- Owl City, "To the Sky" ✯ ✯ ✯
Hey there! If I'm honest when i first saw this poem and read the first two lines I though, "oh dear." However the way you've ended this poem makes the fact that it's so short amazing. The last two lines deliver that effect and impact every good poem should and I think that's why I ended up enjoying this. Very well done. One nitpick i would have is that it's way too short to deliver any kind of message or any real feel of impact, so perhaps keep this but rewrite a new and longer version, no? Keep up the writing! Ben
I agree with Ben. Also, you misspelled your title--you added an extra 'L'. You might want to fix your meter on the last line, and add a comma after 'watermelon'. This was an adorable poem besides those 3 things, and if it were a living thing, I would hug it. Really. It's that adorable.
