There once was you and me

When i look at a sunset,
I think about my life.
how its flashing through my eyes
going at a quick pace,
traveling through time.
when I really think hard...
I think about the times when i was young,
dancing in your arms was all that mattered to me.
now that things have changed,
I've traveled through life growing farther and farther apart from you.
now halfway down the road,
there's a wall that lay between us.
it will never be broken
for you've hurt me so many times.

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I just want to say, thank you for reading my work and this is "dedicated" to my dad.

Hello again!
Wow, another brilliant read you have here! (Thanks for having a look at my work by the way! You're a far better poet, I do admit! )

Anyway! The poem!
Right, I'll start by pointing out my favourite couple of lines, which i have to say contain perfect language choices. There's a vivid picture in this portrayal aswell as the mystery to leave the reader imagining their own situation based on your narrations, which I think are emotionally strong -- which means they're fabulously conveyed!
Any'oo - this is my favourite bit:

I think about the times when i was young,
dancing in your arms was all that mattered to me.

I think this is beautiful! It's a draw-in moment and I can easily relate to this because it's beautifully crafted with simple language and flawless structure.

As I'm no good with poem technicalities, I can't really comment on your punctuation but from my eyes it looks well thought through and revised, so well done. What I do love is the pace of the poem though. It flows very well indeed!

Nitpick? Well, yes. I personally think you need to find a way to shorten this particular line:

I've traveled through life growing farther and farther apart from you.

The length of it seems a little too long and out of place from your poem's structure. It reads okay but I think it would read better if you perhaps withdrew maybe 2/3 syllables? That's a little precise, I realise, but I'm just guessing.

Anyway overall this was fabulous and adorable!
Well done once again!
Keep up the writing!
Ben.

I think about my life(comma)

how it's flashing through my eyes

"It is" becomes "it's" while the possessive form of "it" is "its". Be sure to pay closer attention to this error in the future because spellcheckers won't catch it.

when I really think hard...

I don't much like the ellipsis. I think a comma would be better.

I think about the times when i was young(period or semicolon)

I've traveled through life growing farther and farther apart from you.

This line struck me as a bit too long.

there's a wall that lies between us.

Watch your tenses.

Some things in this poem came across as a bit repetitive. For instance, you use the word "now" several times very close together, and because this poem is so short, it really stands out. Another example are the phrases "flashing through my eyes / going at a quick pace"; they both mean essentially the same thing, and you have them one right after the other.

Another thing you need to watch is your punctuation and capitalization. Your capitalization in particular was very inconsistent, and some of your punctuation struck me as strange or improperly used. Punctuation has a huge impact on poetry, so you have to be sure to pay plenty of attention to it; before you begin experimenting with punctuation, you need to have an excellent understanding of how it works and why it exists.

Hi! Welcome to YWS. I like your poem, it is interesting and emotional, however there is alwayas room for improvement. The first half flows quite well, but after that, some of the lines are a little long and the poem loses its quick pace - try splitting those longer lines in two or saying what you want to say in less words, so that the lines are of similar length. Coiunting syllables might also help you keep up the tempo you set in the first few lines.

One other thing, I would like to see more description in here - something that makes the poem personal to you and gives the reader more of a clue about why you feel this way. Perhaps you could give more examples of good times together, and one or two examples of bad times. This could help the reader relate to what you're saying, and readers love poems they can empathise with. Hope that helps!