werewolves/vampires chapter 2

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Teal'C

"Why the hell did you do that for" I screamed at Anna, who was lounging near the airport water taps. A buzz echoed through the white walls of Auckland National Airport making me feel all happy and giddy inside.
"You know perfectly well why, I don't need you crap right now Teal'C" Anna practically spat at me, she grabbed at her I-pod which had swung slightly out of her forceful grip.
Loud music drummed from the small little green earphones clearly, making me wonder how the hell she could hear me through those things.
"Far-out Annie you think just because Luke has ditched you, Mum and Dad are sending us off to some other random place and well...whatever the third thing was.... you think you can just yell at me and SLAP ME!”
She nodded stubbornly and looked out the translucent window that stood on either side of us.
Anna was about a few centimeters taller than me so I couldn't tower over her and look scary but I could nag her till she came to her senses. I looked around to see if Mum or Dad were coming from the luggage area.
There flight to the Sahara Desert was due soon and I really didn't like sitting in this stupid airport waiting for my own to become ready to depart. I had already done all the fun things in the airport anyway; like ride the escalator up then try running back down, got in trouble for that though. People just don't take to kindly to bratty teenagers who are trying to act like five year olds.
The other thing I did was run up the stairs trying to race my dad to the top. Though it sort of wasn't a race because he was too busy talking on his mobile phone, for the hundredth time today. I also went up and down in the elevator until a security guard came by making me run back down to Anna. The other thing I did was make the sippy taps run continuously to see how many gallons they held, didn't work though instead I got at yelled by Mum. On top of that I tried to make the electrical hand dryer thingies turn on all at one time, it did work this time, tried to beat the world record if there is one. Then I was told to sit down and wait but I couldn't do that so I went in search of Anna who had disappeared.
"Anna at least try to smile this is our last day with them for who knows how long, just smile you could get a free present" trying to barter with Anna was like trying to get a pineapple to talk to you, trust me I have tried, both of them are just so stubborn!
"Teal'C leave me freaking alone!" She cried making a couple of Japanese tourists turn and look at her stupid attempt to make me leave. I of course wasn't going to budge, other than Anna I had had a great time two nights ago. May have lost five bucks and my shell collection but who cares I got a mood ring in return. Trying to beat my friends in a game UNO is like trying to get a cow to stop eating. Impossible. I won once though against Maryanne but everyone wins against her. If it weren't for her mum coming early she would have lost the clothes on her back.
"This is all Mums and dads fault I am not going to suck up to them so I can get a stupid present" Anna mumbled looking down at her I-pod.
"Oh blanch Anna seriously you are acting worse than me"
“We’re about to leave soon anyway so just go and play with the stupid water bubblers"
"It is called sippy taps for your information and no! I actually love my parents and I actually love everything they have done for me" I raised my chin into the air refusing to listen to the garbage that flowed from my sister’s mouth.
"What have they done? We haven't actually ever had a home, I can’t remember one place were I have actually known that I will be able to keep my friends forever"
"We've been to like what three other schools hardly any"
"One in Auckland, the other somewhere else on the other side of New Zealand and one other some where else"
"You know that made absolutely no sense what-so-ever"
"You know what I mean, Mum never read me bed time stories, and Dad never taught me how to ride a bike. They both didn't get all choked up about my first day of school; instead they were worrying about their hiking materials and where they were or something like that. They were never there for us; once they came home they would lock them selves up in their offices and type in their finding to some stupid website. Teal’C… You don’t understand…I want a loving family one where I can feel comfortable and know that I am safe”
"We have a loving family" I insisted looking down at my blue dress which fell to my knees, the long sleeves were decorated with frills and the white long socks with butterflies. I wore my favourite ugh boots, the tan ones to make me feel happy. And on my head was my light black and brown cat eared beanie which made feel even younger. The long sleeves were longer than I had wanted, going to my finger tips but I don't mind.
"Not a normal one!" Anna was wearing navy blue short shorts, a Paramore band tee which was to long for her and leather belt that tightened around her waist showing her figure line. On her feet were her flip flops that seem to sparkle expensive!
"What do you mean?" hushing my voice down to a whisper.
She gave me one of her no-nonsense looks, a thing she had adopted from our mother.
"What do I mean" she tried to mimic my voice but failed "What do you think were freaking werewolves"
"Oh that thing" I said pretending to be stupid.
"I want to be able to go to a diner without having to be thinking about my wild appetite. I want to be able to eat with out killing poor unexepecting animals and then changing back when there is blood all over my face and a dead animal at my feet.”
“I want to be able to look at Luke and tell the truth about why I can never go out with him to the mountains without being rushed at by wolves who are trying to get me to hunt with them. I want to be able to tell him I love him and know that I'm not lying about my whole stupid dumb life" tears began to fall from her eyes and on to her I-pod screen. She wiped them away furiously and looked back down to the floor.
"Well trust me you will never have to lie to him again because you'll probably never see his ugly rat-looking face knocking on the front door... Thank god" I laughed as she tried to hit me.
"Just frig off okay! You're an idiot I hate you!"
"No you don't" I laughed again this time even louder. "You love me, you always have! You love me more than any any any any any any any any any any any thing in the whole wide world.”
"No I don't" she sighed miserably.
"Yes you do"
I pulled one of her ear phones out and made her face me "Look Annie you are just looking at the bad side of being a werewolf, you’re not seeing the good stuff" I trying to be sympathetic, giving her one of my most saddest smiles but instead I just ended up laughing in her face and spraying some of my own saliva into her pissed off features, and well that only made me laugh harder.
A buzzing sound ran through the airport making me look up at the grey speaker phone attached firmly to the smooth wall.
"Terminal B is now ready for boarding" the voice sounded human but I couldn't help but think if it were a computer. I looked down at Anna to see her eyes fall and her breath begin to rise.
"C'mon lets go find Mum and our tickets" I grabbed her hand and pulled her out from the hallway and into the main lobby.
The carpet was a royal blue with green and orange swirls going through it, paintings were plastered here and there while people gathered in a long queue before a waiting desk where a flight attendant would grab their tickets and stamp at it fiercely or type down on a small little computer on the side of the marble desk.
"I don't want go, let me go" Anna cried as I pulled her through the crowd, trying to spot my mothers goofy smile or my fathers worried eyes.
"Teal'C!" A loud voice cried from behind me. I turned to see my Father waving at us; a large smile crept across his face showing his to dimples on either side of cheeks. My mother stood in front of him her hands clasped together nervously, her pearly white teeth sank into her red lipstick lips and faint tears outlined the rims of her sparkling brown eyes.
I began to feel a nervous buzz inside me crawling its way around my heart and head. I wanted to cry but instead I ran towards them pulling my ever so eager sister with me.
Anna began to scream as she saw who I was pulling her towards to “let me go please Anna, you may want to go but I don’t” she cried more tears falling from her cheeks.
Digging my nails into her wrist I heaved her towards my parents making stupid sound affects as I went.
"When is your flight?” I asked mum letting go of Anna’s hand.
"It has been delayed till later in the evening" My father said pulling my beanie off of my head, he had never really liked them. He would always say it made me look idiotic and that I should show the top of my head more often, but I never listened and continued to wear it. I jumped up into the air trying to get it from him, but the man was to tall making me jump until I was lost of breath.
He laughed at me as I sat on the floor sulking, dropping the hat into my lap he turned towards my sister who had a bland expression on her face "Are you ready Annie?" My father asked eagerly. I quickly busied myself with my beanie hoping Anna wouldn’t say something insulting. She didn’t though she didn’t say anything.
"First time to Ireland" My mother spoke rather softly for pain and frustration clouded her face, though she did place on an Irish accent trying to cheer my sister up. It didn't work though but it made me laugh.
My father gave us a travel bag for the flight, even though it was straight through to our destination. "You know what your bags look like right" my mother queried as we walked up a flight of stairs to where all passenger drank coffee or shopped around.
“Your mother has placed name tags on the very top so you won’t loose your things” My father chuckled.
My mother being much louder began to cackle “You’ll have to walk around naked if you can’t find them”
That made me and my father laugh rather loudly, my voice booming over both of my parents. Though Anna, she simply pouted her lips and looked away at the happy family lounging on one of the chairs in the café. Our parents were obviously trying to cheer Anna up but she didn’t like it one little bit.
On the other side of the café was a hall way which leads to staff toilets and the maintenance area. I looked down it curiously. “Where do we go now?” I asked following my mothers foot strides “You have to go to the terminal silly” my father said ruffling Anna straightened hair, she scowled at him backing away from me and our parents.
“Where are the terminals?”
My father lead us through the café to another hall brimmed with plants and photos of famous artists. “Through here” he said pointing down the walk way. Blue translucent windows covered the top of the large doorway. People walked through marveling at the view or the paintings.
"Yes" Anna replied sadly.
“What for?” I asked quizzically knowing that she was going to say something that would break both my mother and fathers hearts.
“For letting me go since I don’t think I like Auckland, I’d much rather go to the other side of the world and live in some stupid boarding school to get raped or abused!” Her voice was rising and the sarcastic tone was being replaced with sheer rage.
“Anna I thought we had discussed this!” Our mothers tone icy, her eyes like daggers.
“What? You don’t want to have anything to do with us so you send us away”
“Your grandmother, my mother just died a few weeks ago so you have no babysitter that is why, Anna O’Sullivan, you are going to Rockwell College!” My father practically screamed “And seeming since I am the head of this house hold you will do what I tell you to do”
“Why can’t we just stay home, we can take care of ourselves!”
“You can’t even shower properly”
“How do you know you’ve never been in the shower before?”
Anna pulled the bag from my father’s fingers and walked off towards the terminal.
“Last call to terminal B” the voice called again
"Anna!" I screamed in disbelief but she was already pushing herself through the hall.
I turned to my mother and father, their facial features clouded with rage. My father threw up his hands and shook his head "that girl has got to much wits in her just like her mothers side of the family" I chuckled at this trying to make them less angry, but that didn’t seem to do anything. An awkward silence passed through us as I looked at Anna charge through pushing anyone who got to close.
My mother sighed "you better get going honey planes don't wait to long and your sister might forget you"
I nodded trying not to turn into a watery mess. I threw my arms around them and hugged them tightly. Anna was gone; I couldn’t see her through the groups of people that had blocked the hallway.
I pulled back and smiled reassuringly "I love you guys, See you when I can" I kissed them one last time and walked off towards the entrance of the hall, waving with practically every step. Tears began to fall from my eyes as I thought about how much I would miss them.
"Have fun at your new school," My father called waving back
"Don't let the bed bugs bite" I called back to them smiling foolishly. My voice was heavy with un-shed tears.
"Tell your sister that we love her!" my mother chimed tears coming to her eyes. She threw her hands around my fathers neck and began to cry even heavier then before. My father laughed and gestured for me to hurry; I nodded and walked, quickening my pace. I looked back one final time to see them waving, I blew a kiss but they didn’t seem to notice turning on their heels they walked away towards the café. My mother rocking heavily in my fathers arms, her cries echoed in my ear making my mood blacker. Placing on my hat I walked towards the group of people.
Once I had gone through the metal detector and signed some papers I went off to find Anna. “What terminal was it?” I asked myself loudly, getting some suspicious looks in return. “B that is right” I took off towards the terminal positioned all the way at the end.
People lined up at other desks handing their tickets to the counter. I kept running until I came close to my terminal, I couldn’t see Anna anywhere, whirling around I called out her name. Blinking my shoulders sagged
“Stupid girl” I mumbled under my breathe
“Teal’C” I heard a voice behind me call, whirling around I saw Anna slowly walking towards me, her phone was in her palm the plainest glare on her face.
I ran towards her angrily not really caring about her own emotional upset "What the hell is wrong with you," I snapped
"What?" she asked innocently, pulling our tickets from the bag.
"Why didn't you say goodbye"
"Because they haven't done me any good"
I scowled at her, turning my back towards her I walked towards the pale white terminal. All the passenger to our flight had already boarded and we were most probably the last ones to actually get on.
A man in his fifties looked at me sharply "Tickets" Anna handed them to him gruffly trying to match his scowl. Typing something up he glared down at both of use “You’re late!” he said through gritted teeth passing the tickets back.
“Sorry” I said politely only to be pulled by Anna towards the entrance. She grabbed at our tickets and pushed me through “Stupid old fart” she spat as we hurried along the hall way.
“Why didn’t you just say goodbye,” I sighed sadly
She didn’t say anything but kept quiet, she turned away from me but I still knew she was crying.

By the time the plan landed my legs were covered in pins and needles “Oh my legs” I complained as I followed Anna out of the plane. She looked back at me and smiled; through the whole aeroplane trip she had been only listening to really loud music and crying under the complementary blankets the aeroplane company had given us.
I rolled my eyes as she turned away, “Cry baby” I mumbled quietly. We walked out from the plane, following groups of people to the main service desks.
“Ireland” I said trying on the accent, I laughed as a few people turned back to look at me.
“Roll your tongue more” Anna said not looking back at me “Like Ireland” Anna had always been good at using her voice. She could reach high tones without even cracking her voice. I tried to roll my tongue on the “R” in Ireland but failed.
“Welcome to the Shannon Airport” A young air hostess greeted us as we stepped into a room full of people.
“If you follow the blue velvet you will come to your bag pick up area” she gave us a toothy smile and pointed towards the pick up area. I ran towards my bag hoping my stuffed bear was comfortable.
“Where are you going?” Anna called, but she followed me once the Air hostess gave her a stern look. I laughed as I ran towards a long black oval shaped machine. Bags were on top of black rubber slipping and sliding as people pulled of their own luggage. “This is going to be fun” I said to Anna as I ran towards my grey bag.




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Teal'C



"Why the hell did you do that for" I screamed at Anna, who was lounging near the airport water taps. A buzz echoed through the white walls of Auckland National Airport making me feel all dont think you need all here happy and giddy inside.

"You know perfectly well why, I don't need your crap right now Teal'C" Anna practically spat at me, she grabbed at her I-pod which had swung slightly nearly would sound better out of her forceful grip.

Loud music drummed from the small little choose one, sounds redundant green earphones clearly, making me wonder how the hell sounds too street talkish here, maybe just say how she could hear you she could hear me through those things.

"Far-out Annie you think just because Luke has ditched you, Mum and Dad are sending us off to some other random place and well...whatever the third thing was.... a little confused you think you can just yell at me and SLAP ME!”

She nodded stubbornly and looked out the translucent window that stood on either side of us.

Anna was about a few centimeters taller than me so I couldn't tower over her and look scary but I could nag her till she came to her senses. I looked around to see if Mum or Dad were coming maybe use on their was instead? from the luggage area.

There flight to the Sahara Desert was due soon don't need soon here and I really didn't like sitting in this stupid a more sophisticated verb? obnoxious, intolerable, maybe even idiotic airport waiting for my own to become just use be, not become ready to depart. I had already done all the fun things don't use such a mundane word in the airport anyway; like if you took out like, it would sound much cleaner ride the escalator up then try running back down, got in trouble for that though use instead - although I got in trouble. People just don't take to kindly to bratty teenagers who are trying replace "who are trying" with just "trying" to act like five year olds.

The other thing I did was again, something more sophisticated? run up the stairs trying to race my dad to the top. Though it sort of take out sort of wasn't a race because use since instead he was too busy talking on his mobile phone, for the hundredth time today. I also went up and down in the elevator until a security guard came by making me run back down to Anna I don't see the corrolation. The other thing I did was make the sippy taps run continuously to see how many gallons they held, didn't work though instead I got at yelled by Mum more description, as in, what are sippy taps?? . On top of that I tried to make the electrical hand dryer thingies you know exactly what is wrong right there. turn on all at one time, it did work this time, tried to beat the world record if there is one. Then I was told to sit down and wait but I couldn't do that so I went in search of Anna who had disappeared. This is starting to feel more like a blog than a story.

"Anna at least try to smile this is our last day with them for who knows how long, just smile you could get a free present" trying to barter with Anna was like trying to get a pineapple to talk to you, trust me I have tried, both of them are just so stubborn! Bloggish.

"Teal'C leave me freaking don't use freaking, its in bad taste alone!" She cried making a couple of Japanese tourists turn and look at her stupid attempt to make me leave. I, of course wasn't going to budge,period instead other than Anna I had only one had, please or say "I'd had" instead had a great time two nights ago. May have lost five bucks and my shell collection but who cares , I got a mood ring in return. Trying to beat my friends in a game UNO is like trying to get a cow to stop eating. Impossible.Love this analogy :D I won once though against Maryanne but everyone wins against beats would make this flow better her. If it weren't for her mum coming early, she would have lost the clothes on her back. Hahahaha, love the humor.

"This is all Mums and dads fault I am not going to suck up to them so I can get a stupid present" Anna mumbled looking down at her I-pod.

"Oh blanch what/who is blanch? Anna seriously you are acting worse than me"

“We’re about to leave soon anyway, so just go and play with the stupid water bubblers"

"It is called sippy taps for your information and no! I actually love my parents and I actually love don't need to say "actually love" again, a little redundant everything they have done for me. " I raised my chin into the air refusing to listen to the garbage that flowed from my sister’s mouth.

"What have they done? We haven't actually take out actually ever had a home, I can’t remember one place were I have actually known that I will be able to keep my friends forever. " Last part sounds a little like her friends are posessions.

"We've been to like what bloggish again three other schools hardly any"

"One in Auckland, the other somewhere else on the other side of New Zealand and one other some where else"

"You know that made absolutely no sense what-so-ever" Don't need to say that exactly
"You know what I mean, Mum never read me bed time stories, and Dad never taught me how to ride a bike. They both didn't get all choked up about my first day of school; instead they were worrying about their hiking materials and where they were or something like that. They were never there for us; once they came home they would lock them selves up in their offices and type in their finding to some stupid website. Teal’C… You don’t understand…I want a loving family one where I can feel comfortable and know that I am safe”

"We have a loving family" I insisted looking down at my blue dress which fell to my knees, the long sleeves were decorated with frills and the white long socks with butterflies. Wait... Teal'C is female? I wore my favourite ugh spelled Ugg actually boots, the tan ones to make me feel happy. And on my head was my light black and brown cat eared beanie which made feel even younger. The long sleeves were longer than I had wanted, going to my finger tips but I don't mind. Stick the descriptions about the dress with the part that you're actually talking about it.

"Not a normal one!" Anna was wearing navy blue short shorts, a Paramore band tee which was to long for her and leather belt that tightened around her waist showing her figure line. On her feet were her flip flops that seem to sparkle expensive! what?

"What do you mean?" hushing my voice down to a whisper.

She gave me one of her no-nonsense looks, a thing again with the thing usage... she had adopted from our mother.

"What do I mean" she tried to mimic my voice but failed "What do you think were freaking werewolves."

"Oh that thing," I said pretending to be stupid.

"I want to be able to go to a diner without having to be thinking about my wild appetite. I want to be able to eat with out killing poor unexepecting unexpecting animals and then changing back when there is blood all over my face and a dead animal at my feet.”

“I want to be able to look at Luke and tell the truth about why I can never go out with him to the mountains without being rushed at by wolves who are trying to get me to hunt with them. I want to be able to tell him I love him and know that I'm not lying about my whole stupid dumb life" tears began to fall from her eyes and on to her I-pod screen. She wiped them away furiously and looked back down to the floor. Aww... okay, I understand alot more now.
"Well trust me you will never have to lie to him again because you'll probably never see his ugly rat-looking face knocking on the front door... Thank god" I laughed as she tried to hit me.

"Just frig off ewww.... do NOT use that. okay! You're an idiot I hate you!"

"No you don't" I laughed again this time even louder. "You love me, you always have! You love me more than any any any any any any any any any any any no no no. NO repetition, especially that much. MAYBE twice. thing in the whole wide world.”

"No I don't" she sighed miserably.

"Yes you do."

I pulled one of her ear phones out and made her face me "Look Annie you are just looking at the bad side of being a werewolf, you’re not seeing the good stuff "Things" and "stuff" are off limits" I trying to be sympathetic, giving her one of my most saddest HORRIBLE grammar there, I apologize. smiles but instead I just ended up laughing in her face and spraying some of my own saliva into her pissed off don't use "pissed off" features, and well that only made me laugh harder.

A buzzing sound ran through the airport making me look up at the grey speaker phone attached firmly to the smooth wall.

"Terminal B is now ready for boarding" the voice sounded human but I couldn't help but think if it were a computer. I looked down at Anna to see her eyes fall and her breath begin to rise.

"C'mon lets go find Mum and our tickets" I grabbed her hand and pulled her out from the hallway and into the main lobby.

The carpet was a royal blue with green and orange swirls going through it, paintings were plastered here and there while people gathered in a long queue before a waiting desk where a flight attendant would grab their tickets and stamp at it fiercely or type down on a small little computer on the side of the marble desk. Good description

"I don't want go, let me go" Anna cried as I pulled her through the crowd, trying to spot my mothers goofy smile or my fathers worried eyes.

"Teal'C!" A loud voice cried from behind me. I turned to see my Father waving at us; a large smile crept across his face showing his to dimples on either side of cheeks. My mother stood in front of him her hands clasped together nervously, her pearly white teeth sank into her red lipstick lips and faint tears outlined the rims of her sparkling brown eyes. Awww, love this part. Check your grammar please.
I began to feel a nervous buzz inside me crawling its way around my heart and head. I wanted to cry but instead I ran towards them pulling my ever so eager sister with me. Was this meant to be sarcastic?
Anna began to scream as she saw who I was pulling her towards to “let me go please Anna, you may want to go but I don’t” she cried more tears falling from her cheeks.

Digging my nails into her wrist I heaved her towards my parents making stupid sound affects as I went.

"When is your flight?” I asked mum letting go releasing of Anna’s hand.

"It has been delayed till until later in the evening" My father said pulling my beanie off of my head, he had never really liked them. He would always say it made me look idiotic and that I should show the top of my head more often, but I never listened and continued to wear it. I jumped up into the air trying to get it from him, but the man was to tall making me jump until I was lost of breath.

He laughed at me as I sat on the floor sulking, dropping the hat into my lap he turned towards my sister who had a bland expression on her face "Are you ready Annie?" My father asked eagerly. I quickly busied myself with my beanie hoping Anna wouldn’t say something insulting. She didn’t though she didn’t say anything. Use although here.

"First time to Ireland" My mother spoke rather softly for pain and frustration clouded her face, though she did place on an Irish accent trying to cheer my sister up haha, that's cute. It didn't work though but it made me laugh.

My father gave us a travel bag for the flight, even though it was straight through to our destination. "You know what your bags look like right" my mother queried as we walked up a flight of stairs to where all passenger drank coffee or shopped around take out "around" .

“Your mother has placed name tags on the very top so you won’t loose your things” My father chuckled.

My mother being much louder began to cackle “You’ll have to walk around naked if you can’t find them”

That made me and my father laugh rather loudly, my voice booming over both of my parents what? What gender??? . Though Anna, she simply pouted her lips and looked away at the happy family lounging on one of the chairs in the café. Our parents were obviously trying to cheer Anna up but she didn’t like it one little bit.

On the other side of the café was a hall way which leads led to staff toilets and the maintenance area. I looked down it curiously. “Where do we go now?” I asked following my mothers foot strides “You have to go to the terminal silly” my father said ruffling Anna straightened hair, she scowled at him backing away from me and our parents.

“Where are the terminals?” who asked this?

My father lead us through the café to another hall brimmed with plants and photos of famous artists. “Through here” he said pointing down the walk way. Blue translucent windows covered the top of the large doorway. People walked through marveling at the view or and the paintings.

"Yes" Anna replied sadly.

“What for?” I asked quizzically again, confused. why would the person be asking why she just answered a quest?? knowing that she was going to say something don't use something, its almost as bad as using "thing" that would break both my mother and fathers hearts.

“For letting me go since I don’t think I like Auckland, I’d much rather go to the other side of the world and live in some stupid boarding school to get raped or abused!” Her voice was rising and the sarcastic tone was being replaced with sheer rage.

“Anna I thought we had discussed this!” Our mothers tone icy, her eyes like daggers.

“What? You don’t want to have anything to do with us so you send us away”

“Your grandmother, my mother just died a few weeks ago so you have no babysitter that is why, Anna O’Sullivan, you are going to Rockwell College!” My father practically I don't think hed get this pissed about this actually. be more realistic. screamed “And seeming since I am the head of this house hold you will do what I tell you to do”

“Why can’t we just stay home, we can take care of ourselves!”

“You can’t even shower properly”

“How do you know you’ve never been in the shower before?”

Anna pulled the bag from my father’s fingers and walked off towards the terminal.

“Last call to terminal B” the voice called again

"Anna!" I screamed in disbelief but she was already pushing herself through the hall.

I turned to my mother and father, their facial features clouded with rage. My father threw up his hands and shook his head "that girl has got to much wits in her just like her mothers side of the family" I chuckled at this trying to make them less angry, but that didn’t seem to do anything. An awkward silence passed through us as I looked at Anna charge through pushing anyone who got to close.

My mother sighed "you better get going honey, planes don't wait to long and your sister might forget you"

I nodded trying not to turn into a watery mess. I threw my arms around them and hugged them tightly. Anna was gone; I couldn’t see her through the groups of people that had blocked the hallway.

I pulled back and smiled reassuringly "I love you guys I don't know about you, but I wouln't call my parents "guys" when saying goodbye. , See you when I can" I kissed them one last time and walked off towards the entrance of the hall, waving with practically every step. Tears began to fall from my eyes as I thought about how much I would miss them. Love these last two sentences

"Have fun at your new school," My father called waving back

"Don't let the bed bugs bite" I called back to them smiling foolishly. My voice was heavy with un-shed tears.

"Tell your sister that we love her!" my mother chimed tears coming to her eyes. She threw her hands around my fathers neck and began to cry even heavier then before drama queen? . My father laughed and gestured for me to hurry; I nodded and walked, quickening my pace. I looked back one final time to see them waving, I blew a kiss but they didn’t seem to notice turning on their heels they walked away towards the café. My mother rocking heavily in my fathers arms he picked her up?, her cries echoed in my ear making my mood blacker. Placing on my hat I walked towards the group of people.

Once I had gone through the metal detector and signed some papers I went off to find Anna. “What terminal was it?” I asked myself loudly, getting some suspicious looks in return. “B that is right” I took off towards the terminal positioned all the way at the end.

People lined up at other desks handing their tickets to the counter. I kept running until I came close to my terminal, I couldn’t see Anna anywhere, whirling around I called out her name. Blinking my shoulders sagged

“Stupid girl” I mumbled under my breathe

“Teal’C” I heard a voice behind me call, whirling around I saw Anna slowly walking towards me, her phone was in her palm the plainest glare on her face.

I ran towards her angrily not really caring about her own emotional upset "What the hell is wrong with you," I snapped

"What?" she asked innocently, pulling our tickets from the bag.

"Why didn't you say goodbye"

"Because they haven't done me any good"

I scowled at her, turning my back towards her I walked towards the pale white terminal. All the passenger to our flight had already boarded and we were most probably the last ones to actually get on.

A man in his fifties looked at me sharply "Tickets" Anna handed them to him gruffly trying to match his scowl. Typing something up he glared down at both of use “You’re late!” he said through gritted teeth passing the tickets back.

“Sorry” I said politely only to be pulled by Anna towards the entrance. She grabbed at our tickets and pushed me through “Stupid old fart” she spat as we hurried along the hall way.

“Why didn’t you just say goodbye,” I sighed sadly

She didn’t say anything but kept quiet, she turned away from me but I still knew she was crying.



By the time the plan plane landed my legs were covered in pins and needles “Oh my legs” don't need to say that. saying you complained is plenty I complained as I followed Anna out of the plane. She looked back at me and smiled; through the whole aeroplane trip she had been only listening to really loud music and crying under the complementary blankets the aeroplane company had given us.

I rolled my eyes as she turned away, “Cry baby” I mumbled quietly. We walked out from the plane, following groups of people to the main service desks.

“Ireland” I said trying on the accent, I laughed as a few people turned back to look at me.

“Roll your tongue more” Anna said not looking back at me “Like Ireland” describe how it sounded Anna had always been good at using her voice. She could reach high tones without even cracking her voice. I tried to roll my tongue on the “R” in Ireland but failed. Its genetic, not being able to roll your R's.

“Welcome to the Shannon Airport” A young air hostess greeted us as we stepped into a room full of people.

“If you follow the blue velvet you will come to your bag pick up area” she gave us a toothy smile and pointed towards the pick up area. I ran towards my bag hoping my stuffed bear was comfortable.

“Where are you going?” Anna called, but she followed me once the Air hostess gave her a stern look. I laughed as I ran towards a long black oval shaped machine. Bags were on top of black rubber slipping and sliding as people pulled of their own luggage. “This is going to be fun” I said to Anna as I ran towards my grey bag.

Okay, so. In general, you have a good start. What you need to work on is punctuation, ALOT. I got tired of adding periods after dialogue, so there you go. Work on vocabulary also please. More sophisicated language always makes a story sound better. You need to describe Teal'C more, because I was thoroughly confused about gender and age the whole time, same with Anna. Take some time to look over what I've done and I hope it will help.
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Ah! I can't read this! Divide it into chapters! It's to long! *runs away screaming
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